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Do What You Want

We are wrong anyway,
in the scheme of it all,
so jump, shake the ground,
let the card house fall.






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i wrote about seventy lines at first, but ended up only keeping these four.

hm...

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • scoff
    November 1

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    Absolutely.

    agree. A lot of meaning conveyed with so few words.

    The house of cards is built of shadows, standing on mists. The slightest disturbance or intrusion of reality, and it will crumble.

    I'd love to see the lines you left out.

    Well done.


  • retribusive
    October 25

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    This is surprisingly very powerful.. there's so much to think about in so few words, which happens to be my favorite style, if you will. Very good piece.