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My broken muse

Sigh, breathing slowly.
Sorry and broken.
Cutting but not bleeding.
Crying as the rain falls.

Pain and love.
left atop the hill.
Crouched and miserable.
Alone.

Sadness.
Broken and bottled.
Nothing but pint up,
RAGE!

Falling fast.
Into blind dispare.
Wanting.
To just die.

Knowing.
Loving.
Lost.

And now,
Alone.
Again.

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I am sorry but my heart just cant love anymore it seems.

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  • JulietteArielle
    October 24

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    I love the way you've written this. It's simply perfect.
    But I am very sorry for whatever happened that made you write this :[
    But it's a great poem honestly.


  • Flo Varekai
    October 23
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    Well done

    I like it. Simple and expressive. I'm sorry things have not been working out in your favor. Love is a painfully tricky thing.


  • eatingupyourmind
    October 22

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    this is awesome, you have such a natural rhythm.
    I dont know if it was intentional but the word RAGE did so much for the flow of the poem,
    well
    done
    and great write


  • Lola-Mac
    October 22
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    I like this

    I like how you didn't have to use many words but the words that you used totally got the point of being hurt across. great work!!