piece by piece you've taken it
winter cloak of woven strength
humble vestments of honor
silken raimnent of sensuality
final shreds of hope
stripped of all my garments of dignity
I'm naked to the world
Author notes
artist credit: ”Loneliness” by David Hall aka Poetic-Theorem
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A contest entry
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Comments
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Excellent
Such a powerful write. And you captured the image so very vividly. Thank you for sharing
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You have captured the despair of having lost yourself to the wrong person. The poem is gorgeous, but it is a devastating read. Really gripping stuff.
Love,
Camille
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You have given the sketch new life by this write. Profoundly poignant in it's brevity but skill of words....I do wish you well in the contest!
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An emotional piece. I take from this that at some level pain cannot be hidden. Well-penned.
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Portrait of loneliness, well described, I hope this is not true...abuse of any kind is sickening it robs the victim of everything and leaves so many mental as well as physical scars
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Talking about packing much into brevity
Wow, this speaks so loudly
you have indeed given my sketch much profound meaning
your imagery is breath-taking in such a few words
I am honored for your times and words
Thank you for your entry
Wish you the best in the contest
David
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This is great. You took a sketch and gave it meaning, breathing life into it.
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oh yea
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i really like this its really true... thats how i felt when my boyfriend vidoed us togeather... he showed it to all of his lil friends... i hate him soooo much i dont even know why he did it... i wrote a poem about about it but i have know idea were it i
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I saw this and wanted to say I'm sorry
This is so sad...
he should be punished for this S
T
Take care
David
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