Quarreling and complaining
Is all what you do,
I can't stand you no more
I hate you.
Your words keep on hurting
Me,you do not have a clue,
I hate when you slam the door
I feel like running away and starting anew.
You are always questioning
What ever I do,
Your whining is getting to my temper's core
The four letter word I wish you knew.
Every morning to late evenings
You have to start a boiling brew,
Every day I wish I never met you before
I bloody hate you.
I wish you would die and leave me alone
Hope you go down to hell,
I would celebrate that you're gone
The difference between you and the devil's mistress is hard to tell.
You were once my star
I will always hate you,you are like a never healing scar.
Every days quarrel fight
Will never make us right.
I hate you
I hate you
I bloody hell hate you.
A contest entry
- Words falling on deaf ears. by kamikage.
650 points, ended November 15, 32 entries
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Your anger is very prevalent and tangible here, I like it!
Some suggestions: the rhyme is a bit forced in some areas. The point of the contest isn't necessarily to fit words in a pattern, but of freedom to say whatever is bothering you. Keep your emotion, that is very good. Maybe, though, you can fix the rhyme a little so you piece flows better. Thanks for entering! -
Wow... now that's full of sheer raw rage and pain. I would definately say that this sounds like something that has fallen on eaf ears many a time and that the person repeating this is completely fed up with trying to get the other person to understand... sometimes that's when it really is time to run away and start anew as you put it
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Tx u
Thank you.Thats exactly how it happens its so so aaaargh!!
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