Deep in contemplation
you knocked
distracted
and
attracted
I buzzed
and huffed
and panted
and am exhausted
I close my eyelids
back
in comtemplation
and now you cannot
knock
because
now
I recognize
even the
sound
of your
tip toed
footsteps.
Whatever Identity you may assume!
Author notes
tip toed
footsteps.
Please tell me what you think
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you seem angry here .... lol whoever woke you up should have let the lion rest. i guess now they'll never fool you again. nice write. can't wait to consume another. hugs~ Cuddles
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Well written with much thought. You show the side of a couple that has been together for a while and know each others moves. But sometime they suprise each other. This is just my thoughts on it but made me happy to read. Well Done
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As always, your last line is astounding. I hate it when someone wakes me up from sleep just to chat. Its very very annoying... Well penned.
Lillie
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Very well done. Your message was complete and the ending was good. I especially like how you spaced the last line. Pen on...
Sharon
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daughter of night
i like the way you wrote this nice very nice -
Each shall know those tip toes, ...
each shall listen to be heard
and when silence falls we listen more
a wonderful poem
Best wishes to you
Julie
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Then comes the telephone, and ya gotta shut off the ringer, when closing your eyes does not shut out the patter of little feet.
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Tip toed foosteps more like elephant feet if you know there beside you lol and a hint of perfume of aftershave gives people away i like this to
wd u
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I like this one...
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i personally think its a good poem for someone your close to.partner,gf,bf,best friend
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