Conned
into belief
yet again
I lick
with
tongue
flicks
the lacerous
wound
that oozes
puss
of your
treachery
and
deception.
You do not even know
that you have such wounds
too
on your being
discover
them quick
and feel like me.
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This is the intensity that moves through all the senses. It's graphic and has a clear message... A pain shared, only becoming real when touched. Your descriptions of this pain are very well written and brings it fully across to the reader.
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Ohh yes!!! Sometimes those that wound you this deeply don't realise how much they have wounded themselves in the process until quite some time later!!
Nice write!
Cherry xxx
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riveting...
you describe perfectly the devastaing pain of betrayal by a loved one..I feel your pain and your burning desire for the object of your love\hate to feel as you do...excellent
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This is different and well thought out. You place your words carefully and make them mean something. WELL DONE!
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Daughter of Night
i like ht meaning of this poem nice work -
I like the way this leaves itself open to interpretation. Each reader may take what they feel from it. You style is good. I'm sure your book will be a hit.
Sharon
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wow.... very dark.... I like it.
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I love the style to which you write, with open ended questions that we draw to our own conclusion.
This poem says that to me, and how we see within your words
Let me think and ponder some more
Much love Julie
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You could put these dark lines all together, into one poem, methinks. This one is quite graphic in description. It draws instant emotional response and the question why. War is never sane.
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Licking old wounds awww cower in the corner hiding as well poor you they will heal with time hunni *huggies* xxx
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