Part 1- the lovers
They ran through the snow,
Hitting branches along the way,
Drugs still in their veins,
A sinister laugh echoing behind,
They heard of the killer, Morgan, who hunted the streets.
About the attractive girl who had a trench coat and two daggers..
Now even the woods had a killer they realized as they tripped holding hands..
Now they lay motionless..
Part 2- capture
They wake to the sound of music,
"The Final" by Dir en grey..
They seen the figure before them..
"Ah you awake at last! Allow me to introduce my self! I am Gabriel and you must be....dinner and shower!"
Gabriel swung his axe and expertly cut "dinner's" hair.
"Bro! Bro! Look we can-"
"Shut up human! How dare you talk to me!"
Gabriel pulls out two shringes and injects Dinner and Shower with a sleep inducer..
Part 3- Dinner
Dinner woke up in the woods..
"must of been a dream" he thought til he got up and seen Gabriel before him...
And piles of dead bodies..
With bite marks..
"Oh how rude of me I forgot to introduce you to Loric my pet." Gabriel said with a smile as Dinner turned to see where his name comes from...
After the polar bear eats Dinner's head Gabriel grabs a drum...
Part 4- shower
Shower wakes in a bathroom with no window.
She looks to find Gabriel sitting down and tears and fear over came her..
"Are you going to rape me?!" Shower asked.
"Aw thats so cute! No that would be beastility! No but I have other plans!"
She pleads "Let me go! I'll do anything!"
He sighs with a smile. "Oh you silly buggy fine just let me push this button-"
The ceiling opened and blood poured out..
Shower heard Gabriel, the man with long silver hair and pale skin, long black trench coat with a sword and axe by his sides, laugh..
"oppsy daisy! Wrong button!"
Shower screaming as her boyfriend's wedding ring falls onto her breast.
She gets up to run...
Till the sword cuts through her right side and the axe cuts through her left.
Author notes
Morgan, the killer mentioned on part 1 was taken from blackrabbit.'s "special pets." A marvelous story about a killer, i call her a hero, that kills the wicked and the scum.
My character Gabriel is the male equilvalent of her.
Though she seems to kill in the city. Gabriel kills in small towns in Alaska.
I think he has alittle bit of Robin hood and the joker in him.
More soon to come.
A contest entry
- Bloody Night by Vampress Alayna.
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Comments
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A very interesting write, there were just a few small gramattical and spelling tweaks.
They seen the figure before them..
Saw
shringes
Syringe
seen Gabriel
The tense of the stanza calls for saw.
Sorry I hate pointing out that stuff >.<; A very interesting write with interesting characters and ideas portrayed. A very snazzy read. -
I absolutely love it! I am very into dark writing.
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Gruesome, not what i'm used to reading in your poems. Quiet a scarry piece!
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Told you i had a dark side
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hahaha Victor! you possibly cannot like ever to me! (I'm going to overlook this piece)
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No no he just kills the bad guys lol
And no my dark side will never be directed at you my dear shilpa
I am going to write more on him though
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ohh i meant you can't ever have a dark side in my head, your way too much of brightness
will wait to read more about him *with my eyes close* hehehe
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with your eyes closed!
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well he is rather scarry!! i don't want nightmares now! hehe
don't worry i will read as long as my eyes allow me to
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Oh hes not so bad. Like a cuddlely teddy bear. He even has a student lol
Hey i got the idea from melissa blame her lol -
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haha gosh your muses!
don't go blaming melissa now
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Hey hey HEY! She came up with the world lol
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nicely done dearest ♥
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They would SO be good for a manga or an anime
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I ment to ask if it was ok i mention Morgan but i forgot too. I apologize
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ummm wow!! LOVE IT! would u like to join my group?
vampress Alayna is my group name
thank u for entering
-V.A.S.H
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