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Sin

Some one please save my soul and save me from this hell,
Forsaken by your lord the reason why it´s here I dwell,
The river of life from me does no longer flow,
Life led, by this knife, a pain far too many know,

Come save me, please love me,
Dear lord I hear you not,
I´m bleeding, harsh screaming,
Oh lord have you forgot?
Soul taken, forsaken,
You I no longer feel,
I´m beaten, mistreated,
Dear lord you are not real

Oh needle tear you hole and please me with your sting,
The only bliss in my life is the joy of which you bring,
This false living makes me feel, "all the way alive"
And this cursed white snow, the source of all my drive,

Come save me, please love me,
Dear lord I hear you not,
I´m bleeding, harsh screaming,
Oh lord have you forgot?
Soul taken, forsaken,
You I no longer feel,
I´m beaten, mistreated,
Dear lord you are not real

Dear lord you sit up high, in your blood soaked throne,
You look down pleased with us, hearing all our tortured moans,
for living my free will, it seems my fate now sealed,
dear lord oh king of death I fear you far too real,

Come save me, please love me,
Dear lord I hear you not,
I´m bleeding, harsh screaming,
Oh lord have you forgot?
Soul taken, forsaken,
You I no longer feel,
I´m beaten, mistreated,
Dear lord I fear you far too real,

Beaten, mistreated,
Forsaken, defeated
This hell from above,
Death kiss, no love,
Forlorn and betrayed,
You keep them afraid,
Rain blood, hell bleed,
Lord you hear our screams?

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Another song a wrote a year or so ago.

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  • Montey silver member
    November 19
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    I gather that you're a good song writer and that you fear what you have chosen and want 'to be saved' yet what you have chosen is also what gets you through.Lots of inner conflict in this.I don't know if you write from experience, but if not, you've got good understanding of how it feels to be an addict and scared and lonely.Monty


    • Manic Reverie
      November 19
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      haha Thanks a lot ^^. It's great having some one actually get into the lyrics rather than say "good write I liked it". Thanks again for taking the time to look at it ^^.