AP had to go to the doctor today
editing was being paralyzed in delay
and comments were choking;
do you know choking could mean dying?
At first the doctor didn't know how to react,
treatment for poems they had lacked
he sent poor AP to the institution for writer's block,
only he'd forgotten it wasn't built yet to stock
The caregiver said, "But you don't understand,
we've found natural remedies that aren't bland
for writer's block by the tree, now please tell me
my dearest AP has encountered what kind of flea?
He said buy a gold membership
and then I might consult with a tip ...
the poet said, NO, giving a kick,
'by you wasting time AP coughed; now I'm sick'
Laying miss All Sniffing Poetry on a bed,
she had swine flu (cut immune system) he said:
next time you go to MSN they'll say
"Swine flu is spreading so fast
it's reached the internet now, at last"
Oh, Kevin and don't forget to rearrange,
you know that robin logo needs a change
do me a favor and place a pig,
also pass some free masks nice and big
Author notes
The inspiration is true (allpoetry was horrible today) the rest i made up.
Enjoy,
!
A contest entry
- Vent. by Walking Oxymoron.
400 points, ended November 21, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
did you you get caught up in it or were youu strong enough
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This was a very interesting view on what could be wrong. I loved that you used metaphor...you personified a website...gave it human condition. Like illness. It allowed you to run with the idea to say what you wanted to say.
Clever.
I thought it was very funny that you talked about writers block,and upsold the gold membership (are you Kevin's daughter??) and then said that AP had swine flu!
That kept the poem revelant and up to date, and also means that in future years when you read this back, you'll remember the current times you wrote it. It'll be a little like a memory.
I like d this piece. It was clever.
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bird
, this is a very cute poem! I especially liked the next to last stanza! "Swine flu is spreading so fast / it's reached the internet now, at last" Well, why not? We do speak of computer viruses, and a virus (and certainly a prion) may be thought of as malignant transfers of information that disrupt a program (DNA transcription). Well done!
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*loves that little emoticon*
Your favorite was my first exciting structure of my poem house too!
About the 'virus' thing, that's where I flunked the other day: I tried to introduce my daddy to this poem in an interesting way, when he went to youtube and his video was jumping unsmoothly. I said, 'the flu virus has reached the internet now!' My bad for saying 'virus' as he didn't really laugh because I was too close to the literal technology term when something goes wrong on the computer. But the comparison is true, he could've had a connective chuckle (oh well.)
Your comment was clever just as I tried to be, thanks for being part of my 24 views showing interest here [that's my most successful poem] -Daisy/bird
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*rofll* Nice. That was really good and put me in a better mood than I already was in.
. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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Thanks Jess. I thought it would be extra fitting with the problems you were experiencing in your own contest, to link you, as a poetic alert, so there's added gladness that your day's grin was sprung a little wider now.. -Daisy
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hahaha awesome!
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I remember you when doing my invite-only contest a while back, even with your participation. Nice to come back to me again and thanks for finding this poem hilarious, that was the intent and now I can come out from my tent.
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