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Immortal

Anonymous.
Hidden behind the words.
Watching from in between the

lines of text.

 

Hidden,

skipping through the pages,

my words watching you,

judging.

 

Swirling up in the dust,

an imaged reflection in the  

mirror,

gone with the tide.

 

Lying on the dunes,

watching the cosmos swirl overhead,

giving way to the pink in the east,

light chasing away the dark.

 

Witnessing as the struggle,

light and dark,

Good and evil?

continues on, and on... 

 

Living,

Breathing 

through the clock,

heart beating in tandem with the second hand, living on as it turns to dust.

 

 

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  • its-worth-it
    November 16
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    somethings we cannot describe simply because there is not a word for it. you told me that ^^ welllll done ahahah.


  • ecogeek
    October 27
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    Whoa, that is really... I don't know how to say it. Intense? Not exactly the word. That is intense and deep. Bravo!


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 26

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    For one so immersed in the throes of youthful vigor, you also seem to possess wisdom that belies your years...indeed, most poets are old souls, it seems, with visions that go beyond the realm of their own experiences. Good luck in Rob's contest, Poet. Savor the time you have, as life is far more brief than we ever realize, until the light begins to wane...then, it speeds by all too quickly.

    • Pyrozia
      October 27

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      Thank you!

      Thank you so much. I wasn't sure about the poem, I didn't really like it that much but now I am more confident. Thank you!

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