A warm summer nights breeze circled,
as I stood on the deck exchanging pleasantries,
our eyes met...
no longer aware of the gentle rocking
of the paddle-wheeler steaming along the river.
Intrigued, flattered, breathless,
I was drawn to your scrutiny,
feeling your gaze penetrating to my soul.
Did you see the wealth of unconditional love
waiting to be tapped,
guarded only by a small, neglected girl
eager to learn and grow?
I saw only a strong, protective heart,
beating behind intense eyes
and an embracing smile.
Still,
with a simple twinkle and a grin,
the girl will release a geiser,
clouding any realities,
of a woman's mind.
Author notes
The girl and the woman never see eye to eye...
A contest entry
- Anything. by tara wilson.
27000 points, ended October 22, 38 entries
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this is such an awesome true poem hun I love it for you have just penned the awesome difference us women seem to see between mother and daughter.. this is awesome Hugs always love♥
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Excellent
What a terrific write. So very creative and well written. Best of luck in the contest
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Wow, this is great, I read this several times, just to get the full feel. This is deep- enjoyable! Nicely done,
Good luck in the contest!
Kris
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Loved this... Love poetry that crosses the boundary into short story... Hmmmm... Perhaps that steam engine bellows loudly and symbolically like a geiser later in the rest of the untold story? Just playing, lol... I actually loved the last stanza as it creates doubt of the final outcome of the unfinished "story" leaving vulnerability and "doubt" in the eyes of the woman, the reader/identifier, anyone searching for love in "clouds", etc... Ends hopeful, but realistic in the fact that reality doesn't always match "hope"... Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest!!!
Peace,
Russell
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aahhh..
what sweet lovely write this is..and like glenn said steamy! mmmm..yeah i like it my friend..good stuff!
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very beautiful with a hint of steaminess loved it good luck in contest sure looks a winne r to me
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