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My evauation

My life dwindles down
The shades of gray no longer
Color in her hair and love in her eyes

In the top peak of life
We all fight to stay afloat
Then the current swipes you
And you seem to drift on forever

In the beating sun the rapids slow
You wonder where you are
You cry as you are beat
Then your rescued

A hand is held out and you take it firmly
That sweet voice whispters
I love you
I am back

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RAWR IM BACK

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  • Inakanu
    October 23
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    this is good nick i'm glad ur back i hope ur happy


  • Kay88
    October 22
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    awww baby i love it amazing god i love you sooo much


  • shattered.frisco
    October 21
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    aw! who ever this poem was for, this is a beautiful poem nick!! thanks for sharing it


  • darlee77 gold member
    October 21
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    Good for you, very good write.


  • carebear123
    October 21
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    awww lol thats so cute. lol

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