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Seasonal distance

 

 

 

 

I

 

It's autumn outside,

  but winter

      within the words

         slipping too far

         from my mouth.

 

I collect white pages

     (with summer's shadow

           supposedly showing

                between the lines);

   

    just to pretend

    I have something more important to say

    than a seasonal distance.

 

 

II

 

Everything seems

       too small for me,

 

           so I decide to paint pictures

           in case I forget

              what no-matter-what

              looks like;

                    

           and expect that even short days

           will spread the sun

              that I feel.

       

 

III

 

Maybe then,

  I'll fail to remember

       These empty syllables,

       filling hours

         with muted memories,

              bedsheets as lost fondling

          and monotone motives of mornings

                  where warmth of my body

                  turns to no one.

 

  (Unless you're part

   of my sunrise).

 

 

IV

 

     So far,

     I did not leave an imprint

                  on this world,

   as if I was never really there

   at all,

 

      though that could change.

                    (Hopefully)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Hoping still

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  • StolenSkin
    October 23

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    you're such an amazing writer. your work always leaves me speechless.


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 23

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    You say i can write vignettes - so do you, my friend. I understand this one so very well and I loved the quiet reflection of this piece.

    Yes, we have to cling to that thing with feathers: hope. wonderful poetry - so happy to see you writing more often now!



    ~ Nicolette

  • mcheadle
    October 22

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    I like this very much

    i could see your heart and soul. You do well, better than you think you do.
    When you get into something you go like a little boat up stream making little ripples for all to want to ceelas they go by. Keep up the good woek. Write things out(or down) and go over then a few times...mac

  • Lugh
    October 22

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    this is very good. Enjoyed it muchly. thank you


  • Cannonsfire
    October 22

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    Imprinting ourselves on this earth can mean so many things, perhaps what we perceive is leaving nothing may amount to a whole lot of someone we touched, or befriended, even just smiled at. I never know what exactly I am doing here lol and I may never know but it still makes me want to write and observe everything I see around me and what goes on around me...I think this is a wonderful piece, I like the vignette style and I am glad that you wrote 'hopefully' at the end because it is one thing no one can take from you except yourself C


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    October 22

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    Superb Plus

    I think it is a very fine write, for it expressed a deep sense of sincere feelings, and that is one of the reasons, we write poetry. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

  • Decidedly

    A good piece of work. I think we all wonder if we will leave some foot print or imprint that is uniquely our own. Penned well.


  • Pallas Athena
    October 22

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    I like this, how it is put together. It lends itself to how it would be said.


  • augustsmile
    October 22
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    grabe! nag ganda...*amazin


  • midnight51
    October 22

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    Yes this is a nice piece indeed and I enjoyed the format to add emphasis on the lines. I really wanted your bedsheets to be "fleeting" though. I still loved it.

    Well done
    Josh


    • midnight51
      October 22
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      Ah, but maybe re-reading that wasn't the point. Ignore that.


  • Unbreakable3
    October 21

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    this is very nice. The formatting and spacing even added a great touch to an arlready amazing piece! You are very talented! Thank you fofr letting me read this!


  • S.Hunt
    October 21

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    Great job.

    You've written this piece of poetry very well. I like the creative form you chose, it looks very appealing on the page. The words you use to express your thoughts and emotions create a pleasing rhythm that flows well from beginning to end. I also like the alliteration you've used in different places "muted memories" and "monotone motives of mornings" these phrases add the finishing touch to make the reading of this poem unique and enjoyable.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    October 21

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    I think you did an outstanding job with this piece
    Very expressive
    I can read your heart in this piece
    Wishing you the very best of all there is!
    ~Heavenly Angel~

  • I love this.


  • breannawilliams
    October 21
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    This is really good! It flows real nicely, and it's interesting and you did a good job at capturing your reader's attention.

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