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The Exotic Dancer

Her moves, panoramic,
deliberate,
with purpose known
to her,
only her;
delivered with the precision
of ancient artisans.

 

A choreograph of yearning

to solve histories secrets

of beauty in motion,

motion condensed like time,

methodical,

mesmerizing,

then,

without warning,

suddenly stops.

 

All who witness enchanted,

frozen as dead,

suddenly acclaim the magnificence

of the performance;

her movements deliberate,

with purpose known to her,

only her.

 

She receives her audience

and accepts their appreciation

with an extended garter.

 

 

 

 

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  • Fire-Fly
    November 10
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    Very nicely written indeed. Lovely use of words here.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 27

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    this is just beautiful!!!

    love & blessings

    Rend


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 24

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    sleek and graceful so sublime i love the way you dance with your lines.. hugs and well penned Angel♥

  • Bad Bill
    October 23

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    You have, I feel, captured the essence and mystery of the dancer in this well-fashioned poem. A pleasure to read.

    Bill


  • mgmc gold member
    October 23
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    Well expressed. I like the first stanza in particular. You've captured the dancer very nicely.


  • ReClaimed
    October 23

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    i like this a lot. being a dancer myself the lines
    "her movements deliberate,
    with purpose known to her,
    only her."
    really capture the feelling of performing. this is a beautiful write!!!


  • stef-witt gold member
    October 23
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    I really enjoyed this write! Thanks for sharing


  • RikkiRae silver member
    October 23

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    An interesting and enjoyable poem. Well done!! However I must admit that your format threw me off a bit as I felt it hampered the flow a little.
    "Sudenly" is that an American spelling?? Or should it have been "Suddenly"??


  • Howl- gold member
    October 22

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    bravo! i loved the alliteration in the 2nd stanza. those M's really roll off the tongue. you seem to write so gracefully and it does wonders to create an image of a graceful dancer.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 22
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    Good to read once again your work after a long time...Effective and creative work!

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