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Pilgrimage To The End Of An Echo

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stirring around in the limbo of erasure
souls entwined
where adage and poet are one and the same

over distances spoke through time
we swim in red sky bed sheet ripples  
through corduroy paths of wheat fields

we jump to be counted as sheep 
in notebook paper sacrifices to insomniac gods
leaping from the edge of the lucid world
into enchanted Utopian seas

bathed in mirror clear waters
that reflect not malice
but rather the end of echo's even

sacred salts sparkle over scars
tattooed in oracles the omens of saving graces
cherished blocks of mineral-lick happiness
laid out in golden pastures

savant idiocies enter through the window
of tightly closed minds
leaving a spiderweb crack in the pain
yet to be replaced

lost in Atlantis to breath aborted air
of mushroom cloud futures in the
astrological year of the cockroach
a fire in the hearth burning secret words
that smolder deep in my pocket

with a rock in my shoe
I dance in goose-down feathers
tarred in milk and honey to
an ancient gong chime rhythm pulse

till I'm tilted one last time to close my
china doll eyes
condemned to Hell

playing bingo Saturday nights

in smoky church basements
with retired and out of work

demons, lost souls and used car salesmen

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  • Jacob S. Steadman
    November 26
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    I thought this one deserved a second read and comment.
    There is so much going on in this poem that it felt like an overload of the senses. A heavy bombardment of gospel-true information that you successfully convey directly to the readers conciousness without losing any integrity of meaning.
    I am glad I took the time to come back to this one and read through it again.
    Speak to you soon, Jimmy.


  • daffodilblossom
    November 19
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    in notebook paper sacrifices to the insomniac gods i luv this line i am holding a contest for my favs i will being adding u on my fav list rite now please enter the contest i love ur work

  • Lifepoet2011
    November 17
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    Totally brilliant. The imagery was fantastic. I loved it. Theres not much else to say, that hasnt already been sai, but really, a truly brilliant job


  • malmadre gold member
    November 14

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    I hope you realize how this excels, I am a hopeless addict for imagery and this has everything to offer for an addict such as me. The title is wonderful, and that's what drew me to read. It's a maze of metaphor, so well presented, a blast with far-reaching fallout.
    It should have been gold


    • bigperm gold member
      November 14
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      thanks

      it's not judged yet...so who knows. Maybe he'll like it idk.


  • Desire gold member
    November 3

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    Oh My Word~

    Wowzers~ I Love how You took this prompt~ the direction You penned and spilled ink Holy Moly
    There were areas I had to chuckle but with a smile
    playing bingo Saturday nights
    in smoky church basements
    with retired and out of work
    demons, lost souls and used car salesmen
    Now that is a sight to see~ and Powerful in its own right
    I Love these lines
    Oh You had me hollering here~
    Excellent~
    and
    astrological year of the cockroach
    a fire in the hearth burning secret words
    that smolder deep in my pocket
    Whoa Momma~ when I got to cockroach-
    I was like...Gosh what year again
    Hopefully not mine~
    Loved it!!!! and that Avator too
    Each time I see it..I can't help but laugh
    Appreciate Your visit and comment on my work

    Keep that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice & Talent
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~




  • Wow... this is really good stuff you know. i am well impressed and glad to have you as a friend on AP.
    BRAVO!
    Jimmy.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 27

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    I feel as if I am lost in the House of Mirrors
    (been under the influence of the Fair/carni pieces by pixiestix)
    with each stanza revealing another distorted mirror
    bending with rampant images---until the final view,
    desolate church bingo!

    Excitingly imaginative, bigperm!

    M-C


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 26

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    Awesome Dude...

    Impressive work...
    Such rich vocabulary & wonderful imagery wrapped in a compelling narrative that enthrals in its depth...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!

  • peyote
    October 26

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    Excellent

    I liked the line of notebook paper sacrifices to insomniac gods,been there many a time.And playing bingo in a church basement with used car salesmen,surely seems like Hell in old age to me!

  • Very nice. I liked the way this poem read. It flowed very nice, good rhyme. The wording and diction, I liked that too.

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