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Your Still In My Dreams

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I have dreamt this dream
a thousand times
it always ends the same

there's only you and I
hiking this steep incline
your holding my hand
I'm trusting you
to keep me safe

when the ledge gives way
I loose my footing
but you always catch me

helping me to safe ground
you gently clean my wounded hands

kiss me on my forehead
and whisper to me  "I love you dear'

as we make our way up
the mountain again
we are laughing and joking
you come to a halt
and I see the look
of terror in your eyes

the mountain has started to corrode
we need to get to the other side
I look into your beautiful brown eyes
and ask you to come with me
without a second thought I jump
I have faith you will eventually follow

I turn to see where you are
you have made the plunge
but your suspended in mid air

Author notes

Prompt: I DREAMED I WAS HERE AND YOU WERE WITH ME

I believe our dreams are our minds communicating with us, giving us images to interperet on awakening.

The one I walk the mountain with, I believe has taken the first step in their new life, but isn't quite sure whether they have made the right decision. I was scared but made the concious decision to look forward and jump.

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  • Swan song gold member
    October 24

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    well woven in that terror and love and compinship are intermixedt hroughout the poem Thank you for your entry Well done


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 24

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    Brilliant write with so much depth
    I do believe in dreams as well
    for they provide us with insight
    to the crazy mixed up world which we live in

    I may not be interpreting this proberly...
    I see one that you love
    (sounds like there is a mutual love)
    and everything appears to be blissful.
    However there is some obsticle (mountain to climb)
    that is standing in the way...perhaps this obstacle
    is a wrong time or place, I am not sure
    This is only my perspective

    Wonderful write
    David


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 23

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    this was something, i always try to return the favor when someone reads my poems and i never regret, i am glad i stopped by, i loved this poem, keep it flowing


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 23

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    I believe that dreams  leave you with a profound feeling
    can give you guidence, I like this one and the way you discribed
    yours, if i have read yours correctly you have a connection
    with some one and this person is dear to you, and he to you
    but right the time is not right until your path are stable
    your relationship will no longer be in limbo, I dunno
    just me and what i have taken from it,

    well done Sweeties

    Love and blessings

    ~Rend


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 21

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    wow..

    what a touching story! and it shows such a faith in another that is truly admirable..and your imagery is amazing in this too..a great write my friend..


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    October 21

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    I'll just nod and send you a




    Juls


  • Bruce silver member
    October 21

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    Wow! That's a very interesting dream and I believe your interpretation is correct!


  • Cannonsfire
    October 21

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    No words..just know I know C

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