I have seen the world in her eyes.
A blanket of the eternal night creates her hair.
I have felt endless desire from her kiss,
the hidden lust between her thighs.
I have traveled the valley between her breast,
felt the silk of her skin pressed against me.
I know the hell that is her wrath,
as well as the heaven of her poise.
To her I am her master,
to me she is my mistress.
I can’t tell what it is she sees in me.
but in her I see my serenity.
Author notes
i know i put this as a dedication and in a way it is, it is to all women in the world i guess. No i am not being a playboy, just this is just a hint of what i see. i hope you enjoy it.
In a list
i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think
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Perfection A+
"To her I am her master, ". To me you are the master, here you are obtaining 20 or more comments per piece of brilliance and there I am getting one if I am lucky enough. I think your marvelous work puts you in the modern world with living people to inspire, while mine becomes antiquated and boring to the point of no return, but wow, I am impressed. I duly respond to the smell of your succcess, I see the poverty of my writings belonging to the dead and I listen to myself, which tells me to give up, I applaud you in all you do, and thank you for being supportive in what now becomes my past. I think I have written my last. Anthony Smith.
P.S. I was always a plain Smith, and no 'Titus' or 'Tercil' was ever going to change it. - I thank you.
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what come on don't even joka about that, your written is great and does not belong to the dead, it belongs to the readerand you. as for me i am not as good as i wanna be yet but i keep pushing forward. you are better so you keep pushing too.
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A fantastic write hunni, I especially like the last verse, neat piece of rhyming there! So beautifully put, well done!
Hugs
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thank you, i am glad you liked it, i like the last verse of this one too
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Ah you write of the women whose fire can thaw the icy bravado of manhood and yet, they too, may show one the way to an inner-peace and contentment he never knew existed within before. Maybe that is the nurturing, maternal touch ... the gentle mother essence within the heart of even the most volcanic of temptresses
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thanks for the comment, i am sorry it took me so long, i don't know how i missed it
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A lot of guys look at women this way. I have always seen them as people that can get me going, mind body and soul. This is hot and has a touch of romance to it or maybe that is just me. SH
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the will do that to any guy,but sometimes the right one will do more , thanks for the comment
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This is a beautiful dedication and I am not surprised that you feel this way. I know that girls like you too.
Love,
Amera
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you would think, but thanks for the comment
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Awesome
This is a very good poem Aaron, you're such a good writer
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you are making my blush here, thanks for the comement
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Thanx, thank you for being the kind of man who appreciated and respects all women, the kind of man who see's the beauty in a woman.
This poem is awesome, and as always it is written with class and style.
Great read!
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sorry it took me a while to comment back but thank you, means a lot that you like the poem
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have seen you around quite a bit lately, so i thought i would drop in and read... really enjoyed your words
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thank you i am glad you stopped by and you enjoyed it.
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AWWWWWWW
This is sooooooooooo great, Aaron! *huggles her poem prodigy*!!!!!
It was so beautiful, so subtle, so gentle, so pure. BEAUTIFUL! I love it!! I hope to read more!
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awwwwww, thank you, means a lot that you enjoyed it.
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Beautiful, Distrbed, another Brillant write.
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thanks i am glad you liked it.
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Very Exquisite DP
you should try writing more like this
Roses to you Aaron
Teresa
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if i did that the other side of me will get pissed. thanks for stopping by
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Oh yes, you pay a beautiful compliment to the female sex here. I like this, the final line is something we all aspire to find.
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it is just how i see woman, thank you for your kind words
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A beautiful, sensual piece (:
My only critiques are a couple mispellings.
In the second stanza, first line it should be 'traveled' and in the second stanza, second line did you mean to say: "felt the silk that is her skin pressed against me"?
Other than that this was an amazing write.
Thanks for sharing (:
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hello again, thanks for the heads up and reading my work
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Absolutely. I plan on reading more from you (:
You're a very talented poet.
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BEAUTIFUL
THIS WAS INTOXICATING ...TRULY ENJOYED THE WRITTING AND THE WAY U EXPRESSED URSELF .VERY SEXY AND FORBIDDEN..ALSO FELT PASSION IN UR DESCRIPTION .LOVED IT
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i am glad you like it, i had something in mind when i wrote it
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