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Thundering Snow

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Snow thunders down the mountains
Like wild horses on the run
I'm skiing, madly seeking shelter
Since that avalanche begun.

My friends are all so safe and sound,
There's no one I can call
I must rely on skiing upright
'Cause it's death if I should fall.

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  • Brook-1 gold member
    November 8
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    That would be one of th worse thing involved in that I can think of. You have to race mighty fast to beat it and not slip or fall one time or you are a goner. Nice way of writing this with such good imagery and description. Thanks for the read.
    Brook


    • rbruce gold member
      November 8
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      Hi Brook. Thanks a lot for visiting and commenting. I wrote this from my vast experience of watching the Tele. I have never skied and only know of snow from the TV. We only wish for it where I live.


  • Ann45 gold member
    October 23
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    Powerful. engaging and wonderful to read. Thank-you for entering
    Good Luck

  • rbruce gold member
    October 23
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    The closest I have been to an avalanche is to watch one on the telly. The pic reminded me of that. Thanks my friend.

  • Coldwater
    October 23

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    BRRRRR! I can see why you chose this to write about, not a speck of dust in sight!
    A good 'breathless' response to the prompt.
    regards.

    • rbruce gold member
      October 23
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      it must be past my bedtime. I thought I replied to you but made a boo boo. You are right, anything but dust. Thanks my friend.

  • A floatingleaf silver member
    October 22
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    Exciting write for the prompt...like it...


    • rbruce gold member
      October 22
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      Short but to the point, I hope. many thanks for dropping in, good to see you.


  • condor gold member
    October 22

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    This is awesome and I love the picture because it gives one a feeling of just what is happening when the avalanche hits. Thundering horses is a great description. I have never heard one nor seen one but I believe they thunder alright. This was excellent, put together beautifully with great flow, rhythm, and rhyme. I wish you the very best in the contest.

    • rbruce gold member
      October 22
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      Another great picture to use as a prompt. Thanks once more for your visit and comments, you are always welcome.


  • Sunshine Always
    October 21

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    Love the pic again Bob,One can feel this write of yours.Excellent as always....mal


    • rbruce gold member
      October 21
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      The pic is the prompt and I love it too. Many thanks Mal, your comments are always welcome.

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