Can you tell me exactly what it is you're diggin'' on in the twilight
I don't think I have a shove
lfor what your selling me tonight
I don't have the bread and Im not into buying
anything but my rights
-oh you need to stop the pullin,
but uh for Christ sake keep up the fight
"when your handed concrete everybody reaches for a cushion'
- oh theres no stoppin the the pushin
that sucker
aint foolin
- and yeah yeah yeah baby its a mother fucker
Its a mother fucker, I Know I know Its a mother fucker I know I Know
Leaves are already turning orange and brown
autumn set in fast and this town is just waiting to lock down
Its been raining raining raining
- raining raining raining raining raining raining
raining all the time
wearing nothing but your schizophrenic smirk
your talking bout sprinkling
barley mentioning drizzling
maybe a spot here or there maybe an angel tear
but baby baby baby you know thats just a tip
soon enough we will all be screaming cats and dogs
cants and cats and
you say I'm always screaming cats and dogs
but I hear a cold mother fucker is about to make his rounds
yeah you know me, Ive been keeping face firmly pressed to ground
searching for a radiator, but none seem to be hanging around
and the winds coming in fast
whistling through the trees
making those haunting sounds
childhood was a blizzard baby and I hate the snow
beautiful but I freeze
and you know you know I hate the snow the snow
A contest entry
- RIP TO MY INSPIRATION ... by righteousme.
1225 points, ended October 31, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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kind of like a song ... thank you so much for your time and talents in my contest ... your entry was much appreciated ...


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My sentiments mirror those of Gemma's--this is defiantly a song and it is rather good. I would love to hear it to some music. Perhaps a mixture between Sarah Mclachlan and a progressive alternative band like Bush. That'd be a perfect mixture

Thanks
Josh -
amazing.
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I don't think I have a shovel for what your selling me tonight
I don't have the bread and Im not into buying
anything but my rights..........
Oh this is faboulous.. I would have to agree you need to do a spell check.
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this sounds more like a song. a lot of lines are interesting and witty. i just think you need to work on the spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
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