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the breaking of alison




too many nights i contemplated
when she must have died
and if her hair had still draped past her chest
shielding her heart behind brunette curls
or if she tried to stop them
from stripping it away
shattering it outside in the parking lot

or had she been my same
handing it over in the soft blue
head down
eyes closed
arms extended like a surrenderer
expending my final thoughts
pretending i knew the colors i saw
when i watched behind my eyelids
"that needs to be what black holes and heaven look like"
i told myself.











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it's easier to blame her.

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  • adolescente
    November 26
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    wow.


  • grassisgreener
    November 5

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    this is empathetic

    the lines

    handing it over in the soft blue
    head down

    really struck me.

  • this

  • lyrebird
    October 23
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    Amazing.


  • swim.x
    October 22
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    .


  • autarky
    October 21
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    -


  • August Starlight silver member
    October 21

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    the applause faces are too happy for this.
    and I think if I dwell on the last two lines too much I'll cry.


  • decode
    October 21
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    no words.


  • tuesdae
    October 21
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    damn.


  • new born
    October 20
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    Wow.

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