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The Alley Part 11 (9-18-09)

Something sparkles in the corner of the room
able to catch it from the corner of my eye

turns in that direction and motions to get up
attempts to stand, stumbles backward

Arms support me back up
I look backward and muster up tha words of
"How tha hell"
he holds his head down
so in turn I can't read his face

I get steady on my feet and say forget it
I go to that which had caught my eye

Many things were upon this ancient yet beautiful dresser
beside it an old gothic style bed with black and red up on it
I let my fingers glide across the objects
cool, smooth, rigid, hard

Looking down and only a few objects stand out
an ancient white go locket
a suede choker with an emblem, with an initial on it
and two rings
one a dragon claw, and the other....a wedding ring?!?

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