I'm a fucking masochist.
--dear, let's think of
pleasantries to exchange
like christmas gifts or
stocks.
NO.
I will not make nice,
play your game for weeks on end,
only to
realize that you're a
supermassive back hole and
proceed to the
nearest exit.
(a slight jog, so you won't
know that I'm
trembling but I've got a
fighting chance at
escape)
is this what it feels like?
fear, I mean.
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A contest entry
- QUICKIE. by winterbound..
525 points, ended October 20, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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i have no critique. it's fine. your free verse is lovely, and this is a refreshing bit from you. it was provocative, and that's all it needed to be.
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I'm a fucking masochist.
--dear, let's think of
pleasantries to exchange
like christmas gifts or
stocks.
NO.
"
-- that is the absolute shit.
I can never get that format to work. it always just looks shitty and left aligned anyway or I have to fix it like a million times and it gives me a headache.
congratulations on the gold.
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Loved the way you varied your language here...the flow itself was creative. Well done! Grats!
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this is so awesome. a really interesting take on the emotion fear. it's not what most people think of initially, but it is scary.
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i love it.
i love it all and then reread it and fucking love it even more.
boss caps lock.
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You're so niiiiiiiiice xD
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Whoa
VERY strong emotions I'm picking up on in this piece, lol.
Marvelous take on the prompt hun!
bravo and best of wishes
♥ kate
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for some reason it shows you entering this twice under a different title XD
ap seems to be having some glitches -
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It's cuz I tried to submit it before, without a title, but it wouldn't let me...xDD
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