Wishing to be anywhere but
this cold dark world-
I dare to dream of a perfect place
Only to be awakened to be pulled back to my reality.
Why can't I escape this cold ,cold world?
Those around can't seem to comprehend.
Not having anyone to go to;
No one to help appease-
I look deep within; I got it!
A huge bang?
Am I dreaming, or back in my reality?
All is calm, All is peace.
Noticing the light-
I got the freedom I finally deserve.
A contest entry
- One Word Prompt #8 by Diminished Capacity.
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Am I dreaming, or back in my reality?
All is calm, All is peace.
Noticing the light-
I got the freedom I finally deserve.awesome lines hun
I love the emssage and the way you penned this awesome poem thank you so much fro your entry many hugs to you always♥
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I am not sure what the word promt was but this was a really good poem. This world can be very cold at times. Thank you for reading another one of my poems. I wish you luck in the contest SH
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Cool.. I enjoy it I know how u feel I feel the same thing I like the first part thanks for sharing with me and thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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I know the feeling here, right now trying to fight it. Its a long story that I will not go into. This was a very well put together poem so many feel that no one cares. The way things have gone that is about right. Few care about what happens to others anymore, just how much money they can get. Most people now a days will let you die before they put themselfs out in anyway. I loved the flow of this, if the contest has not ended then I hope you do great if not then I still loved this SH
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nice write. I like the concept. I hope this is more imagined than experienced. :-)
Write on.
Dez
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An intriguing poem to read. Are we dreaming now? Well done with poetic talent.
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It is great to feel free, I think it's one of the greatest feelings in the world. Great write, thank you so much for entering my contest.
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the emotion and feeling is wonderful. Great job!
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deep
intensely probing, very good visuals also..yet there is a sadness too..hope all is well my friend..excellent pen..
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Another great write. I like the emotion here, write on friend
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Poet
Release and that springboard into freedom. Such a wondrous thing . I still seek it out. Enjoy poet for a new storm may arise.
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A tragic ending for such a brilliant write!
The deep emotion pours from this well written poem,
Wishing to be anywhere but
this cold dark world-
I dare to dream of a perfect place
Only to be awakened to be pulled back to my reality
Sad as coping with life can be sometimes, it is the unknown of beyond that will keep us.
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Easy to relate to:
So often if we just live our life focused on others rather than ourselves, we have less time to cater to depression.
Not having anyone to go to;
No one to help appease-
I look deep within; I got it!
I found this a thought provoking write.
Good to read from you again,
Sincerely,
Cheryl
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