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The Girl Alone...

Walking alone
Yet always surrounded
She blinks away the tears that treaten her...

A lovers kiss
A saviours touch
Is what she craves and yet cannot recieve....

The pain
The tearing
Is always with her as she travels on...

Cursing
Hitting
She finds no solace in the life within her...

Cutting
Bleeding
The pain is a release..but not enough..never enough...

Happiness
Laughter
Is it too much to ask for? To have just once....

Perhaps so...
For she is alone...
Yet always surrounded...
By the pain and sadness of her life...

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  • jackreed3
    November 11, 2009
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    What a sad poem.... a good write ..but sad poem


  • Ravyn Stormcrow
    October 21, 2009
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    you have done it again, emotion to page in a way only you can.

  • msjuicytech
    October 21, 2009

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    I can't tell you how much this related to me...

    A lovers kiss
    A saviours touch
    Is what she craves and yet cannot recieve...

    God, if I could only connect with my soulmate... a relief after work, a sexual release.... At this point in my life.. thats all I desire... So many people around me.. always telling me it will be ok, It will be alright... BULLSHIT.


  • Sarin Rayne Darktre
    October 20, 2009

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    This is such a sad write.I can feel the pain and it makes me want to shower her with hugs and love.You put so much emotion in this and I love it.You are so talented and creative and I always love to read your works.