"No matter how many times one tries to describe love, it is and forever will be
-indescribable. "
Butterflies fell like paper from the ceiling, stiff and colourless, we try to catch them, though we never manage to grasp one. They slid through his fingers carelessly onto the floor, he sank beside it and placed his fingers on its wings.
That's when we both knew, things just didnt last.
He smelled like nights spent in New York, spent beside jazz lovers trying to make ends meet. He was lonely nights spent in hotels meant for the divorced and the alone. He was the man who walked aimlessly and had no where to go.
and i laid in his arms and prayed;
that he love me
and not her.
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Author notes
I haven't posted on here in ages, I did leave... I just needed to write this.
The above quote was taken from my Novella, Amelia. x
He means everything to me. x
In a list
A contest entry
- honestly by emma....
3200 points, ended November 8, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really like this one
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wow
that's just so amazing, i could actually picture a scene in my head you obviously have a fantastic way with words -
A tale of sadness lingers in this poem, my eyes taste it heavily. You have a great ability for describing to the reader all the pertinent information needed to get your point across, Keep writing the good stuff
~John~
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this is beautiful :] i don't have much to say about it, other than i love it. thanks for entering.
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I'm so glad that you're back.
This is brilliant and so terribly sad. You pull this kind of thing off so well.
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yay! you're back! i love you and i love this ♥
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Touching
You really feel how this person is feeling. I like where the lines end and using smell as a way to invite the reader into what is happening for you. Your description of him helps you understand how hopeless the writer feels for loving him, (that's what I got anyway). The only bit I didn't like was the 'and not her'. I know it seems like you need it for the story to be complete, just saying it seems not quite right somehow. Really loved the imagery of this poem. Thanks for sharing. -
This left a lump in my throat, many have been there, this situation and how we want it to be different, if we are lucky it is but life isn't built around good outcomes in this, I know I have seen it. But hearts love who they love don't they. This is emotive and pure, simple and truthful. Good luck
C
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heartfelt and very touching sad but so beautiful
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Wonderful
I think that it's great. It's very painful, yet still not without hope for "him" to return the love. -
fragile
A fragile piece showing how momentary life can by.
Enjoyable read, nice detail.
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a lot of emotions in this....really like it
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Beautiful...
And...tender...
It's like a wisp of a forgotten emotion, who he is...at least to me, a reader, he does.
Interesting. Good read.
-->pia♫♪
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this is just heartmeltingly beautiful, Soph.
I can't wait to read your novella
Love you xxx good luck.
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