The night creeps under my skin
there is little I can do
When time sinks low like this
and bargins life for death
The stars keep me company
and I lay in unbroken silence
To hear their comforting replies
to my fear of being dead
In the dark I fall away
I can't tell if I'm awake
or if I've given in to sleep
The night embraces my solitude
and leaves me without a hope
The minutes speak to me
and fog gets in the way
to what they have to say
Dawn approched slowly
while I faded fast away
In darkness I clung to uncertainty
Wonderings of what lay beyond
was answered by the ghosts
that inhaled my last breath
While the mysteries shown through dim light
the darkness that stole my life away.
Author notes
Usually at night when I have nothing left to think about, I wonder if I really did die in that car wreck and this is my after-life.
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awwwwwwwww, this really tugged at my heart strings, cause it is so full of emotion and I could feel the pain in side, I pray for happiness to come into your life, and even though I dont know you am glad the car wreck didnt take you, beautifully written and I look forward to reading more of your poems
Dawn approched slowly
while I faded fast away
In darkness I clung to uncertainty
Wonderings of what lay beyond
was answered by the ghosts
that inhaled my last breath
While the mysteries shown through dim light
the darkness that stole my life away.
wow that stanza really grabbed me, I feel your pain
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Thank you.
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This is beautiful- so very honest.
I can only imagine the pain of losing a child. I feel such empathy for you and yet I know it cannot compare. I am deeply sorry for your loss. I do have to ask, when did this happen? I've been reading your writing for some time now, and that I can remember, it never came up in the past. That or I'm a really shitty support system with lots of holes in me.
I love you, and I admire you so much for being able to write at all after that...
Take care, my dear.
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Thank you. Yes, I was going through a very very long custody battle with my very abusive ex and two and a half years later, I was forced to just give up. Mentally and financially I was completely drained and things were starting to happen that I started fearing for the safety of my son, so for his own good, I let him go. It's a very long story... no way to explain it in just a few lines. I just love him so much, that if me being out of his life was a way to keep him safe... well, I can't explain it.
I tried not to talk much about it back then. I was going through the custody battle and had hope. When I saw there was no way for me to win, I lost hope and started writing about it after the fact. Two months after losing him, I was in a car accident and was in a coma for almost a year and so, here is this write... me wondering if maybe I did die? Or maybe I'm still asleep? The pain proves different, though. Unfortunately.
I get by though. Day by day, I make it through. I'm married now. I have allowed people into my life that give me support. It doesn't comfort me more than 20 minutes at a time. Everywhere I go, I am reminded of him. Every night there is a dream of him. There is a large part of me missing and there is never going to be a way to fill it. I will never be the same again.
The write I did, "Evaluation", I think probably sums it up the best.
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Well, done and even frightening poem with a fine, if hellish, illustration that fits the poem very well indeed! excellent write!!!
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Thank you very much. I stopped writing "poetry" a while back, after I lost my son and started writing mostly journal entries. It was easier for me to write that way than to write poetry. Still is, honestly. I don't feel comfortable writing poetry. When I read over my attempts, it all feels so forced. This to me, feels forced. I felt like I was forcing it as I was writing it and it still feels imcomplete. I'm glad you like it. It means so much to me. Maybe I'm judging it too harshly. I was honest in writing it, it just seems I didn't get it all out because I was trying to make it seem more like a poem.
I wonder if any of that made sense. At any rate, thank you so much.
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beautiful!
This was lovely, im completely in awe. Some of those likes were so powerful and gave me chills. This was amazing and made me think. Isnt it funny the path our minds take as we sit at night doing nothing in particular sometimes thats the best time to write. Anyways well penned
keep up the good work.
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If this is your afterlife I must be dead too.. So glad to see something new from you. This is absolutely beautiful.
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Thank you.
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