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Melt Away

Cubes click against the side of the glass
as your parted lips swallow
with an insatiable thirst.
How do wasted words taste
when sliding down your throat?






Cold.

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  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    November 3

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    Oh yes, absolutely love this one. Awesome, brilliant, and definitely one of the best in this contest so far. Thank you for entering.


  • Injury
    October 21
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    'How do wasted words taste'. I really like that line. Its good to see your writing again


  • Janetheplain
    October 20

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    I love this. Straight to the point and amazing. Glad to see you back dear

    "How do wasted words taste
    when sliding down your throat?
    Cold."