You try and mimic the gods with your actions;
Achilles and Dionysus, you model them with your steady hands.
You mingle airwaves and distort frequencies with your thoughts.
There is a fire in your core. Smouldering.
Consume. Desecrate. Create.
Destroy order. Status Quo.
Almost like setting humans up as life-sized dominoes. And watching them crash.
Human emotion is your whim; your muse is suffering.
Dominate. Asphyxiate.
Pluck a string and demonstrate your majestic talent.
Stroke after stroke; use your paint to give me a glimpse into the separate dimension that is your mind.
Allow me to live vicariously through you.
Perceive what you never thought possible.
Use nothing but your words.
Blood spills like ornate ink from a quill.
Splatter-
Rain from your gutters.
Shower the innocent. The naive.
Give us your fruitful wisdom;
Divine Presence.
We are not worthy of you, Renaissance Man.
But merely say the word and we will devote ourselves to you.
Like a disease, you spread through.
Infect me.
Infect you.
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This is very odd but entrancing, I fell right into the flow of this poem. I love the cocky tone that at the same time speaks reverently. Good imagery and a good write, thanks for entering and luck to you. ^.^
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thank you so much for your kind words!
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tell me what word to say and I'll say it. this write was captivating. Chez (cannonsfire) was absolutely right. You're amazing with this writing thing.
damn.
not an effective comment, I know. next time, eh?
love,
jin
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Allow me to live vicariously through you.
Perceive what you never thought possible.
Use nothing but your words.
Blood spills like ornate ink from a quill.
Splatter-
Rain from your gutters.
Shower the innocent. The naive.
Give us your fruitful wisdom;
Divine Presence.
I really enjoyed this part of the write but it was wonderful as a whole, I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering it into my contest and giving me the oppurtunity to read it. Good luck!! -
A certain irregular rhythm in this adds to the character of the poem. The subject matter is presented in such a vivid way. Good word choice, without being cliche. Some of this reminds me of things I have written. Thank you for the read.
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Thank you for your kind words! I appreciate them very much!
Cheers,
Howl
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I see your avatar and for a young person that is an interesting mentor to have inspiration from but I read this and I see that you are a thinker and a reader of things, places and the times we live in and it makes my heart glad to see someone this passionate
C
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Thank you so much for you kind words. I truly appreciate them, and it is great to have extremely talented poets like yourself taking the time to read a beginners work!
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You don't have to thank me, it was a pleasure to find a new user that writes so well and of things that often go through my mind as well, and I told others to come read too, I hope you don't mind, I like to encourage people like yourself to write more when you have so much to say. My name is Chez and please feel free to chat or discuss anytime you like
C
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