The merry-go-round is on the center stage,
dazzling, lively with dramatic performance;
and the stationary performers galloping on roll,
with the spirited riders, who are not discernible.
The spectators have gathered around,
the barren trees, chairs and benches full;
of concealed gazes and murmurs of appreciation,
amid the shadows of darkness that is due.
The surrounds are thick with imperceptible presence,
the still environment shudders with swift anticipation;
of the applause rising to deafening crescendo,
splitting the peace into a dreadful awakening.
Author notes
Picture prompt: http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2464/197.jpg?1256180614
A contest entry
- Write Your Expressions In Poetry! by UnbreakableSoul.
500 points, ended October 24, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ENTER poets of the dark by darkyinsoul.
750 points, ended November 3, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Night Terrors by Night Terrors.
400 points, ends December 15, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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well done poet
good flow throughout
like these lines..
The surrounds are thick with imperceptible presence,
the still environment shudders with swift anticipation;
of the applause rising to deafening crescendo,
splitting the peace into a dreadful awakening.
good luck to you in the contest
thanks for the share
Darky
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So many thanks, Darky, for your lovely comments. Delighted that you liked the poem.
Chinmay
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Chinmay, this is so elegantly written.
You word choice is just Excellent!
Very interesting and subtle, you did a great job.
Thank you and good luck to you!
Geneva -
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Many thanks, Geneva for your kind comments and for the Bronze. I'm glad that you liked the poem.
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