She pulls me out.
My long slender length
sits right and snug in her mouth.
A single flame,
lights my burning desire.
With every drag she takes,
she inhales more and more of me.
Taking in all of my poison.
She exhales, a sexy silhouette
in a cloud of smoke.
The gentle caress of her soft
skin delicately cushions me
between her fingers.
She takes me in and
out of her subtle lips.
She takes what she needs
from me, until she leaves my
desire just smoldering ash.
Trading my burning passion
for a ring of red lipstick.
Author notes
You are to write an erotic poem,
take an object and bring it to life,
a sexual life that is.
You can list it in your notes, but allow
your poem to bring it to life.
I think I will wait and just let everyone guess what it is...i think its easy to figure out lol
A contest entry
- Erotic Challenge fot the Judges ... Invite only by Riftkin.
400 points, ended November 22, 1 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
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Comments
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My, my, my.. this is just very beautiful and jam packed full of sensual twists of words and images. Great job
~Serenity
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smoldering sultry essence!
great visuals Id smoke it! they are
my brand!
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never did name a brand...assume you are refering to comment below..lol
thanks for the comment
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lol even tho' I'm not a smoker it makes me think of a doobie or a marlboro light
"until she leaves my
desire just smoldering ash.
Trading my burning passion
for a ring of red lipstick."
great lines Master K....
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LOL thank you...I actually was envisioning maybe a marlboro light 100 or maybe something like virginia slim 120..lol thanks for the comment, glad you enjoyed
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So Inspiring & Sexual
so much here to love - but I think what got me most was the lines -
"She takes what she needs
from me, until she leaves my
desire just smoldering ash."
so true in real life and so much like a woman- or a man
good luck in the contest
W W
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I feel like an idiot because I didn't understand what was really going on until I re-read the title. It was very good, but once I finally understood it, it was even better. Good luck in the contest *although you really don't need it*.
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thanks
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Makes me want to light one up....
I really enjoyed this! It was a pleasure to read! Your word play paints a vivid and seductive picture! I think you should do well in the contest, I think you hit the mark with this one! Good luck!
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VERY NICE not what i was expecting from the name but it drew me in i usely dont like erotic but i like this one thank you for writing it
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