I am one
Yet more than
I am the parch of desert scape
And the water flowing under
I am the hunger of October’s full moon
I am alone inside common laughter
That rings clear as an echo inside the
Corner of a windowless room
I am the keeper that whispers you to sleep
Then wanders the streets listening to the screams
Of midnight police sirens
I am one
Yet twined in the soul
I twinkle while you speak
Yet think of thorn pricks of yesterday
Calm in the knowing of you
Writhing in wrung out days of youth
Confident in stature yet
Confounded by what it took to make
How many mistakes
It takes
To make one single
Man
A contest entry
- Anything. by tara wilson.
27000 points, ended October 22, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is so aweosme
wowww
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The title sums up we need to be packages of deeper nerves emotionally
"I am the parch of desert scape
And the water flowing under" -- this expresses a contrasting personality we all have, sometimes very open and refreshed; other times dry and dormant within ourselves. It's even better because you've mentioned that's the climate you live in.
My favorite metaphor is "That rings clear as an echo inside the Corner of a windowless room," because usually when houses or parts are boarded shut, it gets assumed vacancy or unused, and so you're locked in your own little world even if physically in society, by not being understood.
The poem speaks of, by a special person, being able to push forward from errors, but then without him/her you fall back into the guilt...
I read this before the contest closed, was just too tired to comment, congratulations deserved as much better than my entry -
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What an ending hon...
I think it takes more to make a woman though. lol.
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Beautiful.
Congrats on your trophy!
Love
Myra
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"I am alone inside common laughter
That rings clear as an echo inside the
Corner of a windowless room"
that line is just achingly empty. this poem is incredibly good. I am bookmarking it.
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