Mood: Broken, unpieced, hurting
On letting go, I speak pierced by pain
Love wrote the times together we were
Our childhood, made of days of laughter,
Is now a distant, ancient dream
I don't want to unweave our ties
I can't sever the heart we shared
On letting go, I can say I know
My tears write the lyrics of this,
This strange new song I refuse to sing
Need I welcome a different life?
We've grown from similar roots
Rising above low ground to spring
We were delicate and new
Leaving our mark on the world around
Foreign language and domestic words
I know what it all means, speaks-
Pull apart our souls intensely united
No longer hold hands familiar
Hands I knew as strong and caring
God, please rewrite my misfortunate
I am crying to an extent I'm scared of
On letting go, I hold tight and tighter
Who can force me to free my grip?
My weak hold is my war
My battle against ideas broken
My arms will not know an evanescent will, A faded attempt to love
Bonds form are made of intangible,
Inscrutable knowing of souls
A phenomenon I've learned is mortal
Why? Why not change this simple notion into a law that states:
Winter's wait is summer's sunshine?
Letting go I know is a common foe
A poor excuse to loneliness
Author notes
My cousin did betray just recently, too. Awefully painful. We shared everthing, as you can tell from the piece.
Warmest regards,
Kristy
A contest entry
- Betrayed by dutch2lips.
700 points, ended October 20, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any Merit? Any Constructive Criticism? Any Thought? Meaningful comments please.
Comments
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Bountiful and profound...
I have enjoyed the reading of "A Thought" for its contents and subject dealt.
It seems that a general revision will place it among stars.
In respect,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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the pain seeps through the words, very well written and thank you for entering my contest




