slipped two strawberry wafers
under my tongue
and waited for the world
to dissolve around me
tripped in a dip
on my forehead
[chicken pox scar] ;
searching for god
in my reflection
because today,
I want to believe
but blind faith is too intangible
for these war torn fingers grasping
show yourself [?]
Author notes
prompt: "please, this is all i ask..."
10-100 words
[ 52 words]
note: strawberry wafer ~ lsd
A contest entry
- quickie! by Kathraina.
525 points, ended October 20, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is one of those wow's!!! it leaves you sitting staring at the screen still wrapped up in it even after you are finished!! amazing!!
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frikkin awesome!!! I can really relate to this piece. I love everything about it. congrats on your silver trophy. you deserve it. peace and light, kendal
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wow, very stunning take on the prompt!
i love the tale you've woven here. great imagery and metaphors!
bravo, and thank you so much for entering
♥ kate -
..slipped two strawberry wafers
under my tongue
and waited for the world
to dissolve around me
Love that...
..searching for god
in my reflection
beautiful.....
the end was very cool.....
dont change anything...
you best get gold for this......*smile*
Love it lass,
Liam
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Wow. That last line is like a punch to the gut - knocking the wind out of you, lasting a moment too long........
Just, again, Wow!
ya All-Ways, ~ Jan ~
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interesting take on the prompt. i am sure it was such a trip for her.
nice work.
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This is really good. Loved it.
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