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Tenderness ~Tanka~

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 Such vivid dreamers 

cast magic in woven words
tenderness trembles

compassion captures our core
from her heart's beckoning song

 

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Author notes

The true feeling of Tanka like all other non-English poetry forms has become forgotten over the last few decades and made this wonderful form just an ordinary poetry form instead of a strict form of Zen.
The original pattern of Tanka (short poem) established centuries ago was a length of about twelve onji or sound-units, pausing after the fifth and seventh onji. Two twelve-unit segments were joined, with the closure a final seven-sound phrase added. This means that a Tanka has three parts and each one capable of standing alone. This created the classic 5 - 7 - 5 - 7 - 7 Tanka. In the true Zen tradition this should be adhered to." Quoted from the site The Poet's Garret

http://www.thepoetsgarret.com/orient.html#tanka

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 26

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    You bring back my memory of tackling my first tanka....
    Your imagery shines in this piece along with your sensuous touch that is your trademark in so many of your writes! All the best in the contest!


  • abuyi
    October 20

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    you know i joined this basic haiku class in this site... for like a year or something and still i cant even pass the first assignment. I understand the concept and really appreciate this style but it is so hard for me to write one... the reason i joined this class was you.. you make it look effort less, even this tanka ... its gorgeous and the picture is so cool

    i wish you all the best
    regards
    abuyi


    • ScarletO gold member
      October 20

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      Abuyi, thank you for the wonderful comment. This style I kind of became addicted to for a while for once I grasped it, I could not seem to write anything else. I have not ever taken a class of how to write these, but I did have another poet aid me in writing these at first. Perhaps I could do the same for you.


  • trekkergirl
    October 20

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    wow I really do like the way you wrote this one... not many words but what you used say a lot. And I really do enjoy the picture. Very nice. the little face on the log. Thanks for sharing this with us.


    • ScarletO gold member
      October 20
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      Thank you for your nice comment and I owe you a comment too.


  • Draig aine gold member
    October 19
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    loved the tanka, not sure I follow the notes, tanka predates the zen movemnt I belive tao or other pre zen teachings had more of a influence, now haiku is more zen I think interesting notes

    • ScarletO gold member
      October 20
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      Thank you for your generous comment. As for my notes, I took them from the site you suggested. You will have to talk to them about its accuracy. By the way, congratulations on your first year here at All Poetry.

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