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Sweet Paralysis

Sweet paralysis,
I close my eyes,
and invite you in.

See what this is,
a world of lies,
a world of sin.

But also of beautiful bliss,
Lucy in the Skies,
and the glow of a child’s grin.

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  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 26

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    The blissful joy of sharing a child's happiness! this poem moved from despair, insight and onto bliss within less than 40 words. that's some skilled poetry.