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Tastes Like Honey (A Night of Paradise)

Sweet lingering kisses
On a beautiful summer's night.

A silky mid-length black dress,
With matching black stilettos.

A white dress shirt and dark black tux,
With black dress shoes.

We were dressed for death,
And death is what came.

How could a sweet, honest kiss
Turn into a sour, greedy rage of emotions?

Our night of paradise,
Ruined by your condesending ego.

Your kisses tasted like honey,
With an after taste of acid.

Thank you for the wonderful romance,
And for the not-so-sweet ending.

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  • Swan song gold member
    November 14

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    Your kisses tasted like honey,
    With an after taste of acid.

    This line was steller and I would add a little more to this. answer the question why he was such an A hole in a clever way, but not to bad i think a pretty good poem with some excllent imagery!!!!!


  • fallendust
    October 29

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    beautifully sensual and interesting indeed! Great write! i enjoyed this one! I loved the part about the acid. Very nice touch! hope you had a wonderful day.
    Sincerely,
    Sarah


  • sunshine-light
    October 21

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    I like this one it is one of the best that i have read so far(;

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