I hear his voice,
it claws into my mind.
The devil calls for me,
says it is past my time.
But my darlings,
I am not quite done,
Sorry Lucifer but
my fun’s only begun.
My public begs for me to
show their flaws.
They cry and they scream
to me it is all a kind applause.
This world never fills
off blood and gore.
But my fans,
they just beg more and more.
So, take my word on this
for I cannot be withdrawn,
Hell can wait,
the show must go on.
Author notes
Just my other Alter ego coming out to play, everyone say how to a new friend, Mister H. Quinn. now play nice with him, but then again i am kind of sure he will not play nice with any of you. where would the fun be in that. Fellas hide you women, Women hide your guys, children well just freakin hide. I will be posting more from Mister Quinn.
i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think
Comments
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Makes me think of Dexter... the Showtime serial killer... maybe you know of it/him.
This is great, very chilling as you continue into the read and almost makes one feel sorry for lucifer lol... seems he has his hands full.
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Hehe love this, brought a smile to my face! Nice to see I have someone to play with again, been real lonely in the dark, all by myself
Can't wait to read more Master Quinn! Keep it up hunni 
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well, some of my best memories were in the dark. lol, but please don't give Quinn a big head, he is hard to control as it is. lol, thanks
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AWESOME
Aaron this is awesome, I like this poem... Keep it going
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thank you i am glad you enjoyed it.
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Great write, thank you for sharing your muse's brilliancy once again. 
peace & hugs,
Cyn
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thank you, my muse is hard at work at the moment
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haha this is great (=
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thanks it means a lot that you think that way about this poem
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I was truely amazed. i loved it.
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The twisted mind of the brilliant paints his way into our nightmares once again. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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glad i could paint my way anywhere, thank you for reading my peom
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cool, me likey disterbed. A very twisted way to look at a preformance and I love the pic... Neat!
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thanks i am glad you enjoyed it
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It's brilliant.
Yes! Welcom back to the world of posting. So glad you decided to join us again. && may that muse of yours never go away again.
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me and her are now in talks to ensure that doesn't happen
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I don't usually like writes in this type of genre, but this was really good.
Critiques:
"Sorry, Lucifer but my fun’s only begun." -I'm not sure why, but this seemed a little awkward with the pause.
"My public begs for me to
show them their flaws." -I think this would flow better if it said, "... show their flaws" or "unmask their flaws".
"The cry and they scream
to me it is all a kind applause." -Did you mean to say "'They' cry and they scream"?; And the second line seemed awkward, maybe something like, 'It's my favorite applause'? or 'It's better than applause'?
Done with critiques. Now for the praise (:
"So, take my word on this
for I cannot be withdrawn,
Hell can wait,
the show must go on."
These were most definately my favorite lines.
Overall, I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing!
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critiques & praise
my bread and butter, mmmmmmmmmmmmmm
i will get to fix what i agree with, and the grammar, thank you for stopping by and even if you don't like the genre means a lot to me that you enjoyed this, thank you again, and keep it flowing
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LOL! I like this one from you!
I think we all have that little devil in all of us.
Great work here my friend!
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thanks, means a lot to me, since i am trying to find my voice back
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MYSTICALLY DEVILISH
THANKS I THOUGHT THIS WAS VERY WICKEDLY FUN...FELT THE DESIRE TO SATY AND THE URGE TO GO...STILL IN ALL GAVE A SENSE OF A WILD CARNIVAL WERE THE JESTER REFUSE TO GO....WELL WRITTEN LOVED IT...
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thank you means a lot to me when i can entertain.
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