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Every Nights A Memory

The crisp cold air,
The wind blowing wildly,
I see the animals,
Howling at the bright moon,
I feel the love around me,
The way you hold me close,
I smell the fire,
Roaring miles away.

As the sun sets,
The moon rises,
The sky a gorgeous pink,
It reminds me of our first kiss,
Here like this,
In this same spot,
I can't help but at this moment,
To never want to walk away.

A contest entry

do you like it? i plan on revising it so please leave me commments :)

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • awannabepoet
    November 23
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    Excellent work, I love the way you put this together and brought us full circle with your closing lines.


  • Krblue
    November 20
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    This is great

    This is a wonderful poem. It is reaalllllly amazing. Great write. I loved it

  • MoonlightStars gold member
    November 6
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    Amazing work. I wouldn't revise these two stanzas but would love to read more.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 23

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    this reads as romantic and well put to see as one dreams, thank you for entering the contest
    good luck
    Linda


    • ciara12
      October 23
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      thanks

      well thank you and i'm glad that you like it!

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