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The release

The freedom of sweet melody
  envelops all my senses
to fly with the wind
  into the walls of rain;
the dry southern meadows
    where the fiddle won't stop

The release is near
  within my reach and as I
sing the sweet tunes of the bards
epic tales of old kings
    and the fairest maidens
I grasp the release with my voice
                                    your voice

In beautiful unison
    we tell tales of love and faraway lands
along with the cellos of big concert halls
and opera houses

Your high-pitched escape
  separates the bodies

Our song belongs in the wild

A contest entry

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  • Desire gold member
    November 5

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: The release
    This piece pulls Spirit in its own way. I have read this entry several times ~
    I let each Entrant know firstly-
    I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
    You took the prompt and brought forth much for my Mind to feast upon~
    Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard...
    This is what was shown to me~

    Woven Strengths: Wow~ Love the reference to: walls of rain
    also ...sweet tunes of the bards...
    Powerful weaving of words also Adore the words:
    high-pitched escape
    While reading~ I keep being shown feet stepping through puddles
    and this feeling of cleansing~ the showers from the Heavens cleanse
    the Spirit~
    I am shown word: renewal...
    Also line: I grasp the release with my voice
    your voice
    Interesting image of flowers in bloom...but in slow motion as if to
    relish the moment~ children dancing in the meadow...
    It is like they help the Circle of Life~ they contribute with their presence
    Powerful Imagery
    Hope my Comment makes sense however You feel it to be Interpreted.
    I say the following below to Everyone for I have not been proven wrong yet~
    Note: You give the Reader much to think about
    Love the direction You took with this prompt

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    In beautiful unison
    we tell tales of love and faraway lands
    along with the cellos of big concert halls
    and opera houses
    Tugged at me to Listen...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Will be judged shortly
    Thank You for Your Patience
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 28
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    A lovely, tender, ferocious penning, Poet...and your last line is stellar work. Good luck in the contest.

  • ea silver member
    October 26
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    beautiful and with lots of feeling
    from someone who loves folk violin.