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Memories of sultriness
lost in misty salacious ticks
of time he's taken all of me
on a journey heavenly divine.

I shall always remember
our autumn love
we created in eyes of silence
as the moon faded
then dripped over our souls

It's then life grew
inside as a woman unfolds
brave, sweetly bold.

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Just once in a life time....

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  • tomisb
    October 19

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    I would pick on you about punctuation for in this poem it would help. This is a very sharp economical piece that is sharp, sensuous and full of romance. but (ain't there always) as an example

    Memories of sultriness
    lost in misty salacious ticks
    of (think about dumping this preposition) time, he took (or he's taken) all of me
    on a journey heavenly divine (don't need a comma when leaving out an and)

    You know I love you and wouldn't bitch if I didn't think the little things detracted.
    Love,
    Tom B.


    • ennovy silver member
      October 19
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      tomisb

      thank you for your pointer that have been well taken
      I made corrections. Glad you spoke out bitchy or not...LOL


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 19
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    i would hope it isnt only memories ............