I am not your lover ---
you are insufferable
like the gag-grey shade
of a face found hanged;
a maddening ill when the world had so neatly smudged out
before you birthed a beam;
a scream from your thighs
and the world un-died
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you are good for nothing
but men when they rise
sunlight-stiff.
Author notes
Alectrona: goddess of morning/waking
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alectrona
option 2)
"I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; I lift my eyes and all is born again."
--Sylvia Plath
In a list
A contest entry
- QUICKIE: Head In Oven by Matt E. Smith.
460 points, ended October 19, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Read between the lines.
Comments
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lines three and four and five and last three lines ... this small dab of paint is most powerful and easy to read ... the imagry is crafted and integrated with precision ... I feel much pain becoming softly colorful and then receding again in much of your poetry ... the reader often may become contemplative after reading poems of this style. you have a very original style ... it is lithe, winsome and tender yet takes no prisoners ... I am enjoying commenting on your poetry very much ...
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I'm glad Thanks again!
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nothin like the morning glory and wow youve made it sound even better bless you brilliant here
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I like the tone of this poem. The strong yet softly outspoken the initial lines makes me think that it is a really serious write. As you conclude the piece, yes it is serious with the consideration of light humor. The bitten fact of reality.
I adore how you bring life into certain details and the diction, I loved it.
Thanks again for sharign a wonderful piece.
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Awww, c'mon. We can't help it.
It's morrrrrrrning!
I like this piece a lot. It combines classic and modern elements so smoothly.
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yes, the classics, so very useful to have a ancient goddess in charge of such important stuff. Later, as in Homer, Oddyssey and Illiad; and then the classic writers- she was Eos or "rosy fingered Dawn", with the same job description, sunrise, dew, launching the four winds, and a proper start to a day
... very nice...PK
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love this
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this is a sharp write.
brilliant
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Gorgeous and ripening, Scribe. 
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ok I have one favor, though you write like her, can be bitter like her and the poem is kick-ass..please...if I see you stick your head in an oven then I will kill you!
Totally gold worthy C
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Wow!!!... The last lines made me shiver! Lol. But seriously, i'm stunned!
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I love the alliteration in "birthed a beam"
This is fantastic Allyce, really. Very reminiscent of Plath.
Gorgeous
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I'm with em...
bloody brilliant penning.
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Oh wow. what a powerful and very "plath" like poem. This is almost at her incredibly clever level - i especially like the image of the hanged man (if you can like such a thing)
nice work.
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how did you get so good? really. I need to know!
wonderful! I bow at your feet poet lord! hahaha
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as I was reading this again....I wanted to point out I adore your use of subtle rhyme. I dislike most rhyme but you pull it off brilliantly and it comes across so natural and effortless.
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the first line was so blunt..I was almost hurt... but by the end...I was left smiling. you have made me feel a mix of emotions with this fine write lol.
your style seems very plath-like to me from what little I have read by her so far so it is only natural that you would rock this prompt.
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This is great... it's beautiful in a really... I dunno... NON-beautiful way. Well done and good luck!!
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lol oh you so know you want to
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