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within the hush









beneath a collapse of spine
you measure distance;  five deep breaths

and a layered shift

across the dark space between truths
where blue jays lift and branches settle

 

you ask what is a poet
and i answer,


a person who can not
not write this

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

m

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inspired by: alanis morrisette
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O9mww_drXf0

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  • luv2dream gold member
    November 5
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    "you ask what is a poet
    and i answer,


    a person who can not
    not write this" making me think . love how you write.



  • ccawley gold member
    November 1
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  • tara wilson gold member
    November 1
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    i like this new title, although, i liked the old one too. i thought this was a new poem.


  • porksnorkel
    October 28

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    I like poems with birds.

    I wouldn't say " i answer" but just answer. That's what confuscius would do. I think.

    a poet is a person who writes poetry, and poetry is the writing of a poet, which is simply a person who writes poetry.

    I don't really understand the 1st bit with the spine. I am nearly sure it must have something to do with fucking, but it makes me feel a bit thick, as does most poetry.

    says I to me member, "you ready down there, thickness? "

  • Virgoan
    October 27

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    i won't say any adjective since this piece deserves more than that.

    [clapping nth number of times]


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 26

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    wonderful poetry, well deserving of the gold...

    vivid and delicate


    al


  • just rob gold member
    October 23

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    As impossible as it sounds

    this is actually my new favorite poem about poets or poetry. That really covers a lot of ground. How did no one write this before? It really is one of those. Congrats on a well deserved gold.


    • Cat gold member
      October 26
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      i love this comment rob.. thank you...


  • thepoetssoul
    October 22

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    Congradulations on the Gold, truly wonderful.
    Smile brightly

    Tony


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 22

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    Then I am not a poet but of lover of words,
    yours mainly Cat this is breathtaking

    love and blessings

    Rend

  • Rowan gold member
    October 22

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    Congratulations mary, but could you close the door to your trophy room, it's killing my eyes, even if everyone of of them was/is more than deserved. lol.


    • Cat gold member
      October 22

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      i thought i had those blocked? can you see em?

      you're sweet.

      • Rowan gold member
        October 22
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        I'm psycho, I mean physic....
        Sweet, should be a synomyn for childishly simple. lol. No offense, I am like that somedays.


  • myrataal silver member
    October 22

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    Congrats on a Breathtakingly Beautiful Gold!

    Well deserved, timeless, stunning.

    Love
    Myra

  • tara wilson gold member
    October 22
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    • Cat gold member
      October 22
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      what am i going to do with 25k?

      thank you Tara... i am honored..


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 21
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    grins
    ... or not read it!


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 21

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    you can write this thing called poetry....beautiful.

    ~ Nicolette


  • IronIcecream
    October 20

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    yeah
    i was thinking how to word this without words
    what would be the best succession of smileys for example...
    people would probably understand that it is all about changing gears
    or repairing cars, however they would be deprived of the pleasure
    of exclaiming: this is deep... however, sound resonates...


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 19

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    Your words showed me the dark space between - something I'm fixated on at the moment, now I have another perspective on it, complete with blue jays and branches.

    I write because I can't not write...love this.


  • philosphyofkate
    October 19
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    incredible.


  • jantastic
    October 19
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    beautiful


  • Jersene gold member
    October 19
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    you weave words so beautifully...love the image of the blue jays


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 19

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    Unless you feel this deep in your bones, this calling of the pen, one cannot truly call themselves a Poet. Beautiful, Mary.




  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 19

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    that was kind of out there for me but you know what, i loved it, lol, i am weird like that, keep it flowing


  • Namita
    October 19
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    beautiful


  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 19

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    a person who cannot read cannot speak or hear, doesn't deserve to read this and feel the meaning..
    i applaud you Miss Moo.. for this speaks in volumes of song and love of the written word..
    praise be and blesssings galore

  • Rowan gold member
    October 19
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    Loved those first two lines. Good work m.


  • Emmyb gold member
    October 19
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    Very very good.


  • Allyce May gold member
    October 19

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    I prefer a colon or a comma after answer.

     

    You are inspirational and insanely talented as ever. Such rich imagery and introspective content. 


    • Cat gold member
      October 19
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      thanks. i suck at puncuation..


  • Cannonsfire
    October 18

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    Isn't that ironic...or just plain truth, either way you wrote this you wrote it because it had to be written C


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 18

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    as a moment of truth, you paint the why so well. It isn't as though we have a choice, we just do it because were are. Some are better at it than others. This piece says you are one who is better.

    Good luck to the others, this is gold in my mind.

    Well done.
    buddy

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