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Be Her For Just A Day

Can i be her the one you love
The one you want to be with
For just one day
To be her
Your girlfriend
Your everything
The one you always talk about
Shes beautiful
Gorgeous
And amazing
Things i will never be
She has everything i will never have
Shes everything i wish i could have
Let me be her
For a day
She has you
The one thing i want most
Your amazing
And shes way better than me
I just hope one day
You see how much you mean to me
Im scared to tell you i love you
Im scared what you will think
I cut your name in my skin
To show myself
How much i love you but can never have you
Im messed
I watch the blood drip
Then I lay down
In my bed
To sleep
I pray to god
I could just be her
Even for a day

My poem i think its bad what do u think?

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  • Taka Shira
    October 21

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    THIS IS VERY EMOTIONAL. THE STRUCTURE OF THE POEM INTENSIFIES THE FEELINGS FLOWINT THROUGH THE WORDS. THIS IS A LOVELY POEM . I FELT THE PAIN FROM BEGINNING TO END. AND I THINK THAT ALL OF US AT SOME POINT IN OUR LIFE FELT THIS WAY. I APPLAUD YOU ENTIRELE. A SUPERB JOB....TAKA SHIRA.