I watch a vast
enigmatic space, in twilight confusion, splendid
to the naked, glittering eye which reflects storms
of stars, catches them like gems in a bright bowl.
Granduer slowly expands across a sky stretched in black velvet,
luminesced with a huge and placid moon,
hanging orb, pearl of god's ear.
Ghosts come alive on these nights, and fly through the sky
blazing trails of stardust like scars.
I look up and watch them descend,falling treasures,
Dissapearing in the blink of darkness,
the space behind an eyelid.
Planets bob like corks in a black watered vase.
Graceful silhouettes crowd together like dancers.
I look up into a frozen canopy,
awed by a dark sky that is not dark, and a night that is full
of crushed glitter, showgirl sequins,
and your eyes reflected in the surreal light of saturn, a halo
of space dust
around your head.
Author notes
credit goes to www.usageorge.com for the picture I used as inspiration.
Great contest.
A contest entry
- Night by Ann45.
700 points, ended October 28, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A deep poem in deed. so very creative and the imagery is wonderful. Thank- you for entering
Good Luck
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someone already mentioned the space between the eyelid line (that was stellar!), so I'll mention the other parts of this poem that simply blew my mind:
'hanging orb, pearl of god's ear' (it doesn't get any better than that)
'planets bob... ----> ...like dancers' (that entire stanza made me point at the screen and say Fuck Yeah, Cyanide)
'crushed glitter, showgirl sequins... ----> ... space dust around your head' (pretty much the best ending imaginable to a poem that completely captivated me)
wow girl, wow! wow! wow!
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wow
this poems is lyk super awesome.! great writing.! -
I live out away from the city and am always suprised when city folks are in awe at the night sky. I take it for granted. Great job. I really liked the line about the space behind the eyelid.
Mike
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