Reflecting upon waves of psychotic sadness
a delusional mind shall expose.
Losing control, insane deprived madness
in turn filling my bottle of woe.
In this solitude now I shall confide,
partaking embracing softly seducing
this silence I find to be cold...
Dwelling deeper into the haze
of an irrational frenzied lost mind.
Soul burning within, seeping ablaze
words cannot pertain or define.
A maze of mixed colors wont hold,
a soft interlude of gentle delicate cries.
Whispered upon winds that carry no tone
hushed in the distance left to demise,
as shadows of mists cast the first stone.
Pressure extends to the pit of my gut
as actions are called to amend.
No justification of words anymore
this confinement I now will befriend....
What did you think
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wow. i love this. its full with great emotions. its really sad, and it gets to me. very well written. and as all the others have said, i agree. this is a wonderful and brilliant. great job.
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As everyone else has said... simply brilliant. I love the structure and rhyme of this poem especially. It really adds to the whole feel... it makes it sound like the chant of a spell or something like that
In this solitude now I shall confide,
partaking embracing softly seducing
this silence I find to be cold...
"softly seducing" to me that almost symbolizes a comkplete love of this cold silence... or at least an attempt at bringing this silence around to embrace you in return. Absolutely wonderful!
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Brilliant dark poem Has masses of amazing imagery and a great flow, my favourite part was
Whispered upon winds that carry no tone
hushed in the distance left to demise,
as shadows of mists cast the first stone.
The begining stanza really drew me in as well, I loved every minute
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perfect description of the solitude of grief where even words have no justification. beautifully penned, fav lines:
"Whispered upon winds that carry no tone
hushed in the distance left to demise,
as shadows of mists cast the first stone."
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Love it...
Deep, dark & well penned with strong vocab, wonderful imagery & captivating depth...
Impressive as always...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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this is profound and most likely your best poem to date Darky, congrats on penning such a wonderful piece of poetry.
Your Cuz
awannabepoet
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Oh Darky! I love to come to your poetry. It's like going to a wonderful macabre movie. You make me feel like squeezing someone's hand real tight. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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A brilliant piece of work. Such beautiful lines and imagery lie herein.
Reflecting upon waves of psychotic sadness
a delusional mind shall expose.
Losing control, insane deprived madness
in turn filling my bottle of woe.
Love your work!!!
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wow
this is an awesome poem my dear...
In this solitude now I shall confide,
partaking embracing softly seducing
this silence I find to be cold...
i loves this stanza.
this is indeed a superbly written piece...
feeling the dark in solitude with this one...
to escape to a place of quiet reflection..
well done for penning this poem my beautiful wife..
love your hubby
Jayde
xoxox
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wow
Well penned poet. This was an absolutely breathetaking piece. One possible mistake would be loosing where i think you meant losing? Either way this was stunning and deep beyond my grasp. The photo worked well and was interesting and inspiring.
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