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You were always there.

Lost, afraid, and unsure of what was real

she began to write from the depths of her very heart, soul, and mind.

 

 

There was too much pain and suffering in this world

it was as if a black cloud had landed just in front of the sun

everything she needed to see was invisible in her eyes.

 

 

She turned to release all of this pain, self-hatred, and worthlesness on herself

that black cloud released the pouring rain it had been holding in for so long

she smiled to satisfy those around her, laughed to wash away their concern.

 

 

She was hiding in her skin for all to see she was pain-free

when the reality was she was in emotional pain

without any possible escape, she felt so alone.

 

 

 

 

He saved her from the depths of pain and darkness

He was strong when she was not

He was not an 'escape' but a savior

He washed away her pain, and saved her from that black cloud

showing her the light and removing the darkness

He died on the cross for our sins.

 

 

 

He is Jesus Christ

and he has saved ME.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Adamastor gold member
    November 22
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    Good Evening.

    First of all, I shall formally introduce myself to you. My name is Adamastor, and I am a resident of The United Kingdom, Europe. But I won't get into that, I'm here to talk about you.
    I think it is good that one writes so freely about their religious belief. I myself believe in the Church of England, the acclaimed sect of Christianity of King Henry VIII. In my country, you get asked to hide your necklace if it depicts either St, Christopher or a cross, as it might offend Muslims or Jews. Now, not that I am one to be against the beliefs of anyone different to mine, I must say it's disgruntling, since those same Muslims wear burkhas and those same jews wear thoses dangling sideburns to show their faith. Now if those don't offend me, why would wearing a cross offend them?
    Anyway, I like how you have expressed yourself with this poem, and is worth 3 applause alone. However, I can only afford to give you one applause, since I'm new and I don't have many points to spare. Rest assured that my comment and review of your poem is a good one, and your final score, is in fact 3.
    Thank You,
    Adamastor.


  • Ms.Daydream
    November 8

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    This is really touching, a real tribute to our saviour. A lot of good imagery here. God bless you. =)


  • glow-worm
    November 5

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    i like jesus too

    but you should use a bigger variety. many words are in there like five or six times. use a thesaurus and youll have no problem. I do love the effect of the poem though!


  • Talking Toni gold member
    October 18

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    BEAUTIFUL NIKKI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This is sooooo right and about you personally I know!!! I could tell you were trying to act as if you were ok, but all I could tell you was to lean on Jesus and he would carry you through the darkness and into the light!!! And he has!!! You sound so FREE in this write like you have been waiting to write again but couldn't until now now when Jesus has set you free from darkness and dispair!!!! I am so happy for you and hope that all the pieces of your life will now start to fall right into place!!!! Thanks for sharing your freedom with me today!!!!! Love you dear!!!!~~~~Toni~~~~


  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    October 18

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    Amen! Girl this was great. A beautiful testimony, and I know a lot of people can relate to feeling that way, and someone saving them from those feelings. Beautiful job girly!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~

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