Perhaps and Maybe
Perhaps all you wanted to say was, I’m in trouble and need your advice.
Maybe all you wanted was to look once more in my eyes…
Perhaps you wanted to offer yourself, and test what would be my choice.
Maybe all you wanted was just to hear my voice.
Perhaps you wanted to tell me that you had hit a new low point.
Maybe it was all a mistake because you’d just smoked a joint.
Perhaps you didn’t mean to call me, and your fingers just hit the wrong keys.
Maybe you just wanted to see if your voice would bring me to my knees.
Perhaps you were thinking you’d call, …and we’d just talk.
Maybe you realized you wanted nothing more than a walk.
I don’t know what you wanted; I haven’t any idea at all.
And even though it makes my heart flutter, I wish you wouldn’t call.
If ever I find another love, I want to be first in his life.
I won’t play the part of a runner-up to a girlfriend or a wife.
If I can’t be first in your heart, then I don’t want to be at all,
So wrap gold foil around my memories and nail them to your wall.
Keep them as a trophy – a conquest you have made…
I’ll always remember the love we shared, but it’s time to let it fade.
You can’t be a part of my life any more…and I can’t be part of yours.
The key you used to open my heart now doesn’t fit my doors.
You go your way, and I’ll go mine…and if again we meet,
Let the past stay in the past, …there’s a future I want to greet.
m
Author notes
This was written some time in the past - It IS the past, but at the same time, there are days when the PAST catches up with me, and I hear it knocking on my door to dispell TOMORROW. I can't reach out and grasp TOMORROW if I'm still clutching hold of YESTERDAY. I watched my dog chase her tail today...and I understood.
Written April 11th, 2004
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WOW..this is absolutely amazing!! A very empowering write and by sharing your thoughts on this, I'm sure you have given stength to others!! Who wants to be 2nd to anyone..no one should have to ever be!! If someone truly loves you, they should want to be right there at your side!! And isn't it amazing how such a small gesture, whether it be from our animal friends or even a small child, we can gain such powerful insight. I love it!!!
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I love this! It's written so well, flows great and says it like it is and should be. Never should you have to be 2nd to anyone, ever! Way to say it and hats off to you for being brave enough to say it and mean it! Bravo!! A most excellent and powerful piece. Blessed Be
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M, this is an excellent poem about past relationships and love long gone. Wonderfully written and well expressed. I have sometimes found myself chasing my tail too in real life as well as in love before I found Carolyn. I thoroughly enjoy reading your writes; you do such a great job on them. Thanks for sharing an older write with us.
Damon D. Brewer -
Wow, very well done. I love the emotion overflowing here. I especially loved this line 'So wrap gold foil around my memories and nail them to your wall' Such amazing imagery evokes itself from that line on its own, let alone the entire piece. This was a wonderful write!
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I love this poem! It really struck me, because I can relate. You found the words that I couldn't and you blew me away! I love the line, "The key you used to open my heart now doesn’t fit my doors." It's just SO true! I LOVE THIS!
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Excellent poem! Wonderfully said. It flowed very nicely and spoke right to the heart. God Bless, Patty
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Excellently Expressed!
Wow!!! Thanks for the wonderful read, and I hope things work out for ya, and writing always seems to help release the emotions inside, and may I say, you do this lovely! Thanks for sharing you, and please pen on!
-Timothy -
Yeah, it was really deep. I enjoyed it a lot. There is someone out there for all of us, or at least I like to think there is. Your author's comments made the poem seem even better, or at least it did to me. I also like the message, and the form, also. Wonderfully write.
SadAndLonely -
this was deep and full of meaning don't worry your dream man awaits
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Wonderful
I think that poem was great. i think that is how a friend of mine feels towards me. keep up the good work. -
Nice poem. I really liked your author's comments too. I agree with Elizabeth about how life can give you an "A-Ha!" moment and you suddenly realize what the lesson was. Good message in your poem too about not becoming the "other woman". Well done.
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It's strange how the simplest things can have the most meaning to us, like a dog chasing its tail. We chase our tails so often, though we hardly ever realize what we're actually doing.
I like the part about wanting to be first in someone's heart. I can really relate to that, especially since the guy I love has just recently gotten married, though I admit that it doesn't change what I feel for him. The next time I give my heart to someone, though, like you said, I want to be first in their heart, and I hope that by then I will be able to put them first in mine, also.
Anyway, great write. It's very touching. You make some great points, and it is beautifully written. Thanks for sharing. It's always nice to read something that I am able to personally relate to.
~Miranda -
Awesome
Need I say more?
Write on the Fly!
Cheers!
-Jacquie
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This is a powerfully written poem, lots of feelings. Keep up the super work!!
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excellent
hurray...this is apoem i want my daughter to read.very honest from the heart words. -
Loved it =)
Oh, what to say.... so many thigns to say.
First of all, I'm commenting on your author's comments. 'I watched my dog chase her tail today... and I understood.' Funny how we can be taught some of life's most important lessons at the most unexpected time, from someone or something that's not even trying to teach us that lesson, isn't it?
My only constructive criticism is that some of the rhymes seem forced/trite (advice/eyes). But all of the lines were wonderful. So perhaps you might want to restructure this into a freeverse. Just my two cents... it's your own poem, you definitely don't have to take my suggestions.
Otherwise, there were so many things I liked about this. I really liked the line 'So wrap gold foil around my memories and nail them to your wall--' it really struck a chord with me somehow. The image is just wonderful.
'Perhaps all you wanted to say was, I’m in trouble and need your advice.
Maybe all you wanted was to look once more in my eyes…
Perhaps you wanted to offer yourself, and test what would be my choice.
Maybe all you wanted was just to hear my voice.'
I could step right into the words on that part. For me, that was the best part of the poem.
Overall, I could identify with your words, and they were well-laid out on the page. Great write, awesome job, and all that jazz.
Elizabeth
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