Memory
cruel in detail
strangle drops of silver
from crystallized rose leaves
waiting for this silence
the message
that is meant to be seen
Your infected, twisted trust
a breath whispering silently
you cant fake a smile within
when your jaded angels sing
the same song, a beacon
that none can see
How much have I created
in the illusion you cling to
precipitate the damage
bend the basic structure
for the messenger to return
to show me, how much is real
Place a confession
in the mouth of the creator
leave it be
for just a moment, untouched
your elusive satisfaction
constantly overlooking
that I am the message
beyond your reach
Please tell me what you think
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this has a strength of voice i find very appealing in lines like "sing the same song, a beacon that none can see" or "place a confession in the mouth of the creator leave it be for just a moment" - gets the message across.
nicely done.
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this one stings a bit.. being a masochist though, i kind of like it.
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Sis,
What abeautiful read this one is! I love it!! There is something in this one.. It really is amazing!!! but then again, all your writes are this way!!!
and love
Nyetta
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another example of your amazing skillfullness, i absolutely loved reading this, your work is something else, i can't really specify as to wich part i liked the most, the whole thing was absolutely wonderful.
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beautiful
I loved it! U kept me captivated till the last word! Great job!
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Well done Sis! This is a very pointed and deliberate read almost like a rant. You attack with the precision of a surgeon’s knife and hold your readers captivated.
Love,
Amera♥
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wow
you excel in thi write pretty much... I was taken by your elsuive concept..wherein you state emphatically that not all can successfully communicate with your inner self.....those few that can perhaps do not..and that hound you....are not worth it......guess its point blank.here. -
Wow that was a very powerful piece sis. You create such poems with such a deep emotion. In ur poems there is some sense of not everything is as it seems ;-) very nice job on this write sis.
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