Disarmed and helpless
my emotions robbed from me
I stood naked
of all pretences
that ever formed my defense mechanisms
you had that way about you
where you looked deep
and pored in soul
and made that gaping hole
in that which palpitates on left
which was hard to sew
your sugar sweet begs
for affection and love
had me reeling
making me see white doves
in mind that was on heavenly reel
wiping clear my memories past
as if an anti virus
that works complete and fast
you caught me sudden
and had nothing left hidden
disarmed and helpless
I had to yield
to your charms
to you amiability
to your stability
to your personality
to your attitude
with no regrets
but a lot of gratitude
that enveloped in swarm
you are now a part
that is so diffcult to part
why did you imprison
this free bird
in the mansion
of your being
I love nothing
over anything
any longer
as i inhabit you
and,as I grow
with you
stronger
and stronger.
Guess we are both obligations free!
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wow
i really like this. its so cutee i gatta say ^^
-Kelly
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BRAVO!!
I love this one! I really enjoyed reading it! This a beautiful piece that many will be able to relate to. You paint the scene vividly with your excellent choice of words..It is beautiful! I love the lines:
I had to yield
to your charms
to you amiability
to your stability
to your personality
to your attitude
with no regrets
but a lot of gratitude
I really enjoyed this one, BOH! Thank you for sharing such a lovely write!
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Daughter of night
aww i really liked this poem good job jonh
sincerly,
angel -
beautiful
another awesome expelling of feelings and love thank you, luv it...
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this is quite lovely~
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This is just filled with powerful strength and flowing emotion. Very vivid and enjoyable. A wonderful write!
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It is a wondeful feeling to be part of a relationship and I feel you describe how this makes you feel very well. I hope it proves to be very happy
Cherry
xxx
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I really like the first 4 lines as they immediately caught my attention....it is a poem that tells a story of passion and love..always a good theme....I also love the lines...why did you imprison this free bird in the mansion of your being...this is very imaginative and paints a picture that I like....I also loved the last 8 lines as they pour out the passion and yearning in a heart and soul caught in a cage of love....
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(bows and smiles)
This shows a lot of emotion and where you're coming from. What are you searching for my friend. Diving in and finding strength. But from who? How? Why? Love? You are caged but say never to such thoughts. Strange. Has your perspective changed? Poor little bird. You write your entrapment however as if it is not a bad thing entirely. You seek peace. Freedom. And yet here you are trapped. Perhaps you seek something more now. This was beautifully written and very meaningful. Well penned, Sir.
Your Czarina,
~Seraph
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Very good outlook and well written poem. Can we ever really love someone with no obligations? Just a thought. God bless.
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Isn't it great to feel such strengh in life aswell as love. This poem catches that ecstasy and wanting, luring one deeper into the sesation of humble thoughts, the deep flutter that you feel within the wits of your heart. Superbly written dear poet.
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Awesome! : )
This is really good and i really enjoyed reading it! : )
I Love how is just says and stuff like that.. you really should keep writing and i really should keep reading!! : ) I Love it.!.!.
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