Paint me red with your anger
yellow with your happiness
and blue with your sadness.
Mold me with a gentle hand
Carve me with razors
and crush me with your fist.
Pick me up and start over
mend me with your love
and patch me with your lies.
Your work is finally complete
display me on a shelf
I am your masterpiece.
stupid i know
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great job, a absolutely love it!
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thx a mill
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this is absolutley amazing. well donee.
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i love it.
wonderfully written
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now i know how sally from nightmare before christmas feels. i love all the emotion and pain you portrayed with so little, simple words. i love it. ....and if any sonofabitch does this to u, he's dead! ily
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very powerful!! sad and it's horrible how many of us experience this eh??
I loved these lines the most
Pick me up and start over
mend me with your love
and patch me with your lies.
They really struck me as I have been here and know of this pain
Great write sweetie xx DD
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Very Good Write
i read both ur oldest and ur newest.. i must say this is the best out of both...
i really love the stanza
Mold me with a gentle hand
Carve me with razors
and crush me with your fist.
i love it...
good job...!!! keep up the good work...
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i like this. its a different kind of work for you. the begginning is fantastic
Paint me red with your anger
yellow with your happiness
and blue with your sadness
i told you u r a great writer.
lol, ily dear.
great write,
keep them coming!!
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This is absouletly amazing. It's so...undescribable. I love the words you used, they work so perfectly together.
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It is not in the least way stupid. It is fabulous. I love it. At first it reminded me of a contest a friend and I did on SW about feelings and ideas and objects and what colors were associated with what. After reading it through, though, it reminds me of a play dough person seaking to its creator of its creator. It is a very visual poem. Very good. Keep up the good work.
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thats really good short but sweet, like u! well except for the sweet part though... lolz luv u and u did fantastic in ur preformance! ur da best!
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i can be sweet!!! lolz just not to u
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thats really good short but sweet, like u! well except for the sweet part though... lolz luv u and u did fantastic in ur preformance! ur da best!
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Mold me with a gentle hand
Carve me with razors
and crush me with your fist.
it is so not stupid it is really good, i wish i could flow with my poems that good! -
IT IS NOT STUPID!!!
This had a great metaphor and a variety of colors that sparkle with life. The sheer emotion lying behind the words gives this a brilliant poetic spark...of inspiration!
I wouldn't change a thing.
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Dax♥~*•
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I love how you discribed the different motions of the art you became. I love how you don't just describe what the person is doing, but what they are doing it with. Good work.
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I like this one piece!
Actually very clever. Well done.
Taylor.
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this is not stupid this is really good i like it
awesome work on this
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not stupid
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Its not stupid and i love it, a great metaphor and well written, excellent!
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not stupid...
I Like it... it is a very good description of how we are molded by life and love. I like the way it flows. it doesn't seem too forced and it has a nice rythym.
My Favorite part is:
Your work is finally complete
display me on a shelf
I am your masterpiece.
I got a mental image of you...so tiny and small sitting like a doll on a shelf...But this part also sums up the poem giving it a very nice ending. I Like the poem a lot...Keep Writing Destiny...
Love Always,
Karlie
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This poem was pretty impressive you know!
Great use of vocabulary and emotions, you got everything out nicely and you made everything flow oh so well
I hope you're alright though! Stay strong for me
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this was awsome hun!! i really like the metaphor!!! this was a great one and i personaly really like it!!!!
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Wow, firstly I wouldn't change a thing... So many emotions in this write, and so many powerful lines... I applaud you dear poet....
'Mold me with a gentle hand
Carve me with razors'
'and patch me with your lies.'
Beautiful...
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